NationStates Jolt Archive

I already submited this but I think it didn't get accepted.So I decided to do another verison and see if anyone has any suggestion
Name: Well Known @@NAME@@ diplomat starts an international religious controversy
Description: While in Steveland A well known @@NAME@@ diplomat accidentally vandalized the holiest vase in Steve land’s state religion, Steveism.According to ancient scriptures (On the vase) it says that he must be punished with death.

Valid: Everone

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”This man must be put to death at once” yells President of Steveland @@RADOMNAME@@ “Our nations for the first time in history where having diplomatic negations on trade rights and your diplomat vandalizes our holiest vase! This is as evil as your computers! I wonder how your @@MAJORINDUSTRY@@ without our oil! If you don’t kill him now we will put an embargo on your nation.
[effect] @@NAME@@ citizens live in fear form the government letting religious organizations execute them for commenting sins after learning about a diplomat being burned to death by the steveist.
[status] Economy increase, civil rights decrease

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“Please don’t kill me,” says the well known diplomat @@RADOMNAME@@ hiding behind your desk in your office “It was only accedent. It looked like toilet to me if I known that was a holy vase I wouldn’t of gone it. Please don’t let them kill me it’s for so people of @@NAME@@! Who knows who they would go after they kill me it’s for they might go after @@NAME@@ and this would threaten the lives of the people! @@SOLGAN@@”
[effect] A well-known diplomat is getting blamed for the near economic depression after urinating in the holiest vase of steveism
[staus] ecconmy goes down, civil rights go up

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“I got a solution” says intelligence officer @@RADOMNAME@@ “We fake this diplomat’s death so that the steveist think that he’s dead and he’s really not and put him in the government witness protection program or somthing like that.Then he can be a diplomat again so he can make importent negitions.Then everone is happy”
[effect] A conspiracy theorist book “the diplomatic toilet cover up” has been this years best seller do to rumors of a well-known @@NAME@@ diplomat still being alive that were fueled by sightings of him alive
[status] Book Publishing goes up, Manufacturing goes down

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“I got a solution that will not only save diplomats life but the people of @@NAME@@” says steveism leader @@RADOMNAME@@ “You adopt as your new state religion and the people will be saved. God bless the @@TYPE@@ of @@NAME@@!”
[effect] steveism is the state reilgon for @@NAME@@ but most people don’t like because of the lack of computers in the new religion
[status] Information Technology goes down, civil rights goes down, Manufacturing goes up,
Name: Well Known @@NAME@@ diplomat starts an international religious controversy
Description: While in Steveland A well known @@NAME@@ diplomat accidentally vandalized the holiest vase in Steve land’s state religion, Steveism.According to ancient scriptures (On the vase) it says that he must be punished with death.

there was not enough time for the mods to see it.

there was not enough time for the mods to see it.
I kind of thought it would be that but I thought it needed chages after I submitted it.I didn't think it would get accepted the way submitted it.

Name: Well Known @@NAME@@ Diplomat Starts an International Religious Controversy
Description: While in Maxtopia, a well known @@NAME@@ diplomat accidentally vandalized the holiest vase in Maxtopia's state religion, Frisbeeterianism. According to ancient scriptures (On the vase) it says that he must be punished with death.

Valid: Everyone

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”This man must be put to death at once” yells President of Maxtopia @@RANDOMNAME@@ “Our nations for the first time in history where having diplomatic negations on trade rights and your diplomat vandalizes our holiest vase! This is as evil as your computers! I wonder how your @@MAJORINDUSTRY@@ without our oil! If you don’t kill him now we will put an embargo on your nation.
[effect] @@NAME@@ citizens live in fear form the government letting religious organizations execute them for commenting sins after learning about a diplomat being burned to death by the fresbeeterians.
[stats] Economy increase, civil rights decrease

[option]
“Please don’t kill me,” says the well known diplomat @@RANDOMNAME@@ hiding behind your desk in your office “It was only accident. It looked like toilet to me if I known that was a holy vase I wouldn’t of gone it. Please don’t let them kill me it’s for so people of @@NAME@@! Who knows who they would go after they kill me it’s for they might go after @@NAME@@ and this would threaten the lives of the people! @@SLOGAN@@”
[effect] A well-known diplomat is getting blamed for the near economic depression after urinating in the holiest vase of frisbeeterianism
[stats] ecconmy goes down, civil rights go up

[option]
“I got a solution” says intelligence officer @@RANDOMNAME@@ “We fake this diplomat’s death so that the Maxtopians think that he’s dead and he’s really not and put him in the government witness protection program or something like that. Then he can be a diplomat again so he can make important negations. Then everyone is happy”
[effect] A conspiracy theorist book “the diplomatic toilet cover up” has been this years best seller do to rumours of a well-known @@NAME@@ diplomat still being alive that were fuelled by sightings of him alive
[stats] Book Publishing goes up, Manufacturing goes down

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“I got a solution that will not only save diplomats life but the people of @@NAME@@” says Frisbeeterianism leader @@RANDOMNAME@@ “You adopt as your new state religion and the people will be saved. God bless the @@TYPE@@ of @@NAME@@!”
[effect] Frisbeeterianism is the state religion for @@NAME@@ but most people don’t like because of the lack of computers in the new religion
[stats] Information Technology goes down, civil rights goes down, Manufacturing goes up,

I changed all references to 'Steveland' and 'Steviesm' to 'Maxtopia' and 'Frisbeeterians' because they exist in many other issues and the Mods will just have changed them anyway.

I also changed all the spelling errors.

Or you could trash the diplomat thing and change steveism to "the order of Violet" theres at least two issue that use that.

My version:

Name: Well Known @@NAME@@ Diplomat Starts an International Religious Controversy
Description: While in Maxtopia, a well known @@NAME@@ diplomat accidentally vandalized the holiest vase in Maxtopia's state religion, Frisbeeterianism. According to ancient scriptures (On the vase) it says that he must be punished with death.

Valid: Everyone

[option]
”This man must be put to death at once” yells President of Maxtopia @@RANDOMNAME@@ “Our nations for the first time in history where having diplomatic negations on trade rights and your diplomat vandalizes our holiest vase! This is as evil as your computers! I wonder how your @@MAJORINDUSTRY@@ without our oil! If you don’t kill him now we will put an embargo on your nation!
[effect] citzens live in fear of breaking minor religious taboos
[stats] Economy increase, civil rights decrease

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“Please don’t kill me,” says the well known diplomat @@RANDOMNAME@@ hiding behind your desk in your office “It was only accident. It looked like toilet to me if I known that was a holy vase I wouldn’t of gone on it. Please don’t let them kill me, even if it’s for the people of @@NAME@@! Who knows who they would go after after they kill me?
[effect] the government is known for not blatent disregard of cultural customs
[stats] econmy goes down, civil rights go up

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“I've got a solution” says intelligence officer @@RANDOMNAME@@ “We fake this diplomat’s death so that the Maxtopians think that he’s dead and put him in the government witness protection program or something like that. Then he can be a diplomat again so he can make important negations. Everyone is happy.”
[effect] conspiracy theories abound about a diplomat execeuted for offending Maxtopia
[stats] Book Publishing goes up, Manufacturing goes down

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“I got a solution that will not only save diplomats life but the people of @@NAME@@” says Frisbeeterianism leader @@RANDOMNAME@@ “You adopt as your new state religion and the people will be saved. God bless the @@TYPE@@ of @@NAME@@!”
[effect] the government has made Frisbeeterianism the state religion to increase trade
[stats] Information Technology goes down, civil rights goes down, Manufacturing goes up, economy goes up

Thanks for the help I'll make chages to it.