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Very Rough Draft - My Issue

Andaras Prime
12-01-2005, 09:46
I thought this would be a good idea for an issue, i haven't come across any other issue which it is ripping off. Take in mind that this is extremely rough and my first issue. I'm not really sure about some of the stats or the validity, but if you could point out if one already exists like it or what it overtly wrong with it i would appreciate that, Thanks :) .


Propaganda Wars in @@REGION@@

Recently some of the @@NAME@@ 's neighbors in @@REGION@@ have started Army parades in the street and Air Force shows in the air to show you their military power and superiority. Fierce debate has sparked over what to do about it

not valid for those without a military

[option]"It's obvious we need to fight fire with fire", says General @@RANDOMNAME@@ of @@NAME@@ 's Army while whipping a new recruit climbing a big wall. "The only way to show these blood sucking foreigners that we can't be intimidated is doing what their but only heaps better!, the government needs to increase funding to the military, especially the Army and have daily military shows to the public on live TV, then we will be the talk of @@REGION@@ and those foreigners won't mess with us."
[effect]expensive military parades are held everyday to keep foreigners from attacking
[stats]defence increases, public apathy increases, economy decreases

[option]"Your being way too soft on these animals", says retired ex-soldier @@RANDOMNAME@@ in his war veterans retirement home. "I've fought these foreigners and I know the tricks they use, there warming up for invasion that's for sure, the only word they understand is force so what the government needs to do is cut off all diplomatic relations and trade and cut ourselves off from these scum. Surround the country with land mines and trip wire bombs and also increase border defenses etc... That way nothing gets in and nothing get out; we'll make our own commerce industries. Sure the economy will definitely suffer, but it's the risk you take in war and the tax should handle that."
[effect]innocent tourists venturing to the nation are often blown up or gunned down due to the strict border protection
[stats]defence increases, population decreases, tax increases, commerce spending decrease

[option]"Army parades!, land mines!, what nonsense!" says peace lobby group leader @@RANDOMNAME@@ while throwing rotten fruit at a government building "What we need to do is disarm our weapons and promote peace, I'm sure these foreigners just do this because they are threatened by us! If we disarm and show we only mean peace I'm sure they’ll do the same, I hope, I think us civilians have the right to have a say in the act the government makes and without all this money going to making these devices of death, could we please a rest on the tax”
[effect]the nations anti-war and weapon disarmament policies left it vulnerable to invasion
[stats]civil rights increases, Defence spending decrease, Arms Manufacturing spending decrease, tax decreases

[option]"You know their is another way", says Special Agent from @@NAME@@ 's Intelligence Organization who can't tell you his name or he'd have to kill you. "Myself and my colleges have been working on a solution to this called "Project: Bluff". All we have to do to is parade our military around like the General said but just make fake weapons, metal cap guns, and big metal missiles with nothing inside. From the TV the enemy won't be able to tell the difference and it will have the same effect. It's a win-win for all concerned, we keep our national security and we don't have to start another arms race, we could have all weapons banned and trade on the bluff. It will be great for the economy! Unless of course they call the bluff."
[effect]the nations soldiers are often caught on the battlefield carrying fake weapons
[stats]economy increases, Defence spending decrease, Arms Manufacturing spending decrease
Maubachia
12-01-2005, 17:40
I particularly like the effect of option two here. Not sure why civil rights increase on option three, though.

On option one and four, increasing military spending often boosts the economy. Military contracts to private-sector suppliers are good money, in most cases. Your options could really have the opposite effects, depending on the amount of military spending already in the budget.

Would like to suggest something funny for option four, like that "Military parades are cancelled whenever there is more than a light breeze."

Grammar - option one - "their" should be "they are"
option four - "their" should be "there"

Using the @@REGION@@ variable is fraught with peril. In my case, it would return "Greater_Caribbean_League," with the underscores. Suggest you rephrase.

Overall, pretty good. Love your quotes.
Andaras Prime
13-01-2005, 00:00
I particularly like the effect of option two here. Not sure why civil rights increase on option three, though.

On option one and four, increasing military spending often boosts the economy. Military contracts to private-sector suppliers are good money, in most cases. Your options could really have the opposite effects, depending on the amount of military spending already in the budget.

Would like to suggest something funny for option four, like that "Military parades are cancelled whenever there is more than a light breeze."

Grammar - option one - "their" should be "they are"
option four - "their" should be "there"

Using the @@REGION@@ variable is fraught with peril. In my case, it would return "Greater_Caribbean_League," with the underscores. Suggest you rephrase.

Overall, pretty good. Love your quotes.


Cool, Here is the updated version on your advice. BTW I kept the civil rights increase on option 3 because I thought passing legislation into a policy of disarmament by a peace lobbyer shows the rights of a civilian to change policies greatly increased, thus increasing civil rights in it. If you think that or anything else should be changed before I submit it or any other advice, please tell me.


Regional Propaganda Wars

Recently some of the @@NAME@@ 's neighbors in the region have started Army parades in the street and Air Force shows in the air to show you their military power and superiority. Fierce debate has sparked over what to do about it

not valid for those without a military

[option]"It's obvious we need to fight fire with fire", says General @@RANDOMNAME@@ of @@NAME@@ 's Army while whipping a new recruit climbing a big wall. "The only way to show these blood sucking foreigners that we can't be intimidated is doing what they are but only heaps better!, the government needs to increase funding to the military, especially the Army and have daily military shows to the public on live TV, then we will be the talk of the region and those foreigners won't mess with us."
[effect]the daily army parades have citizens woken up at the crack of dawn by blaring trumpets and rifle salutes
[stats]defence increases, public apathy increases, economy increases

[option]"Your being way too soft on these animals", says retired ex-soldier @@RANDOMNAME@@ in his war veterans retirement home. "I've fought these foreigners and I know the tricks they use, there warming up for invasion that's for sure, the only word they understand is force so what the government needs to do is cut off all diplomatic relations and trade and cut ourselves off from these scum. Surround the country with land mines and trip wire bombs and also increase border defenses etc... That way nothing gets in and nothing get out; we'll make our own commerce industries. Sure the economy will definitely suffer, but it's the risk you take in war and the tax should handle that."
[effect]innocent tourists venturing to the nation are often blown up or gunned down due to the strict border protection
[stats]defence increases, population decreases, tax increases, commerce spending decrease

[option]"Army parades!, land mines!, what nonsense!" says peace lobby group leader @@RANDOMNAME@@ while throwing rotten fruit at a government building "What we need to do is disarm our weapons and promote peace, I'm sure these foreigners just do this because they are threatened by us! If we disarm and show we only mean peace I'm sure they’ll do the same, I hope”
[effect]the nations anti-war and weapon disarmament policies have left it a popular choice for invasion
[stats]Defence spending decrease, Arms Manufacturing spending decrease, tax decreases, civil right increase

[option]"You know there is another way", says Special Agent from @@NAME@@ 's Intelligence Organization who can't tell you his name or he'd have to kill you. "Myself and my colleges have been working on a solution to this called "Project: Bluff". All we have to do to is parade our military around like the General said but just make fake weapons, metal cap guns, and big metal missiles with nothing inside. From the TV the enemy won't be able to tell the difference and it will have the same effect. It's a win-win for all concerned, we keep our national security and we don't have to start another arms race, we could have all weapons banned and trade on the bluff. Unless of course they call the bluff."
[effect]the nations soldiers are often caught on the battlefield carrying fake weapons
[stats]economy decrease, Defence spending decrease, Arms Manufacturing spending decrease