NationStates Jolt Archive

A group of low funded scientists have discovered a way to make unborn children have a predominate emotion when they are born.
(opotion) Member of scientific committee @@RandomName@@:"its possibilities are endless we could have partriotism a predominate emotion, we could make compassoin a thing we are know for."
(Effects) Most sceintist reguraly modifed unborn babys to have loyalty to @@nation@@, others make mad warrior servants to themselfs."
(stats) Personal freedoms goes down Crime lowers
(Opoition) serial killer on death row name withheld: "this could also go horrbly wrong i'm a person with an emotion level of anger called beserk and it's intoxicating, i had a nice wife good kids a sweet puppy and now i am about to lose them becasue of this emotion, and they could make people like me who are always in this emotion i shudder to think"
(effects) biological study here is on the decline, except for mental health
(stats) health goes up, education goes down.
(Opoition) "this could work we could create a milltary group who all had patroitism and endless courage we could make are selfs feared" Says Miltary genral @@randomname@@ "man all we whould have to do is show up and all would cower"
(effects) @@nationsname@@ is in the proscess of making a to the deat loyal army.
(stats) Defense goes up, Tax goes up 1%.

First of all, I'd go and re-read the submission guidelines - the way you've done it is going to fill my screenpage with errors. :wink:

And learn how to spell 'option'. :P

Plz tell me what you think. its my first idea. comments welcome.

iv'e forgotten where that was could someone inform me.

There's a link in the issue submission page which you can find by clicking the 'issues' link in the left sidebar.

It's rather... clumsily worded. Beat on it with a stick (or a beta reader) for a few days, and then try showing it to us again. I'm not even *entirely* sure what some of your options are saying.