NationStates Jolt Archive


New economy issue - suggestions

Strensall
10-04-2004, 17:50
Should I post this as a new issue? Does it sound OK to you guys? Any suggestions to change it? What do you all think?

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Name: ???NEED SUGGESTIONS

Description: Leading economists say the government's economic policy is threatening @@NAME@@ with a crash. They would like the government give more freedom to the economy in order to prevent this.

Validity: Nations which have outlawed private enterprise

1) "These greedy capitalists don't know what they are babbling on about", rages aggravated socialist @@RANDOMNAME@@. "And so what if they are right. Even if our economy crashes, at least everyone will still be equal. Surely thats where our priorities lie."
[Effects] The country is in the midst of an economic recession
[Stats] Economy goes down, Income equality goes up, goverment size goes up

2) "I tend to disagree" murmurs a billionaire, currently on holiday from a capitalist country. "I pay enough in taxes to support a whole town on the dole. I know they are living on the breadline, but what little they do get they get without having to lift a finger. The government should leave the economy to us entrepanuers, then we'll be the richest country in @@REGION@@. Sure the poor may suffer a bit, but who cares?"
[Effects] The rich are once again getting richer
[Stats] Economy goes up a lot, Income equality goes down a lot, government size goes down a lot, crime goes up a little

3) "You're both wrong." says anti-capitalist anti-socialist fringe group leader Dr. Cunningham. "The government has shown us it is unable to look after our economy, but it shouldn't relinquish control to fat-cat transnational corporations. Of course small businesses should be privatly owned, but large businesses should be owned as cooperatives by the people who work in them."
[Effects]Loaded business directors are leaving the country in droves
[Stats] Economy goes up a little, government size goes down, income equality goes down a little


So what do you think?
Fort Liberty
10-04-2004, 21:02
I like it. Get this going right away!
Bonadrey
11-04-2004, 01:45
Does it sound OK to you guys?
Actually, no.


Description: Leading economists say the governments economic policy is threatening @@NAME@@ with a crash.
You need an apostrophe. And what do you mean by this:

They would like to soon the government give more freedom to the economy.

It makes no sense at all.

The rest is at least understandable, but I'd dismiss it so as not to have such garbled syntax and appalling punctuation show on my countries' pages.
Strensall
11-04-2004, 16:04
Sorry about that, I made some last minute chages before I posted and forgot to proof read. I've done as best I can with the punctuation and spelling; I can't find any errors anymore. I've also shortened the effects. I agree the syntax was a little bit too long.