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The King of the Campbell Islands, King Jason I (need to think of a name) was a man known for his actions. First, he killed his father, to seize power. Then, he killed his own mother, thinking she was in opposition.

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Next, he raped his own sister, one of his sisters and killed her. Over some time, he would rape and kill his other sisters, execute his brothers and seize power totally. However, one sister, Princess Anastasia remained. She was able to flee and is in hiding.

Now, King Jason rules absolutely, as the King of his nation. Anastasia is still in hiding. Will a nation come in and deal with this King?

Note-The story is of a King who killed his parents, killed and raped his sisters, killed his brothers, saw his only remaining sibling go in hiding and now rules totally.

To the nations on the forums:

After reading this, if you want, you could topple King Jason and place the Princess in power, I guess. Tell me about if you want to or not or what not first please.

This is my first thread on NS so I hope it goes good. The reason its my first? I'm a newbie!

Completely OOC (out of character).

I'm looking for a few smaller nation that I can 'take under my wing' until those nations' population have grown large enough, their economy strong enough and their military powerful enough to start a decent rebellion or war against Saint Fedski and eventually win through a peace treaty.

As part of the becoming a protectorate or vassal of Saint Fedski, one is granted access to the Commonwealth and given the protection and services of the Commonwealth Armed Forces. All the Commonwealth asks in return is that the vassal remain an ally of Saint Fedski and that its military operate hand in hand with that of Saint Fedski.

Saint Fedski will equip, train and transport the vassal's military for no cost as they are part of the Commonwealth.

Of course if you wish to end the RP sooner, you may, I can't force you stay in an RP you don't want to be in.

Completely OOC (out of character).

I'm looking for a few smaller nation that I can 'take under my wing' until those nations' population have grown large enough, their economy strong enough and their military powerful enough to start a decent rebellion or war against Saint Fedski and eventually win through a peace treaty.

As part of the becoming a protectorate or vassal of Saint Fedski, one is granted access to the Commonwealth and given the protection and services of the Commonwealth Armed Forces. All the Commonwealth asks in return is that the vassal remain an ally of Saint Fedski and that its military operate hand in hand with that of Saint Fedski.

Saint Fedski will equip, train and transport the vassal's military for no cost as they are part of the Commonwealth.

Of course if you wish to end the RP sooner, you may, I can't force you stay in an RP you don't want to be in.

Sounds ok, I guess but I was thinking some nation would intervene against the King or something, perhaps leading to an RP as you say. Read my first post for a story on the King.

I don't know about joining the Commonwealth of St. Fedski also.

I could force you to join I suppose

I could force you to join I suppose

I don't know, you could but that won't be a njce welcome for a newbie.

I thought I had a fleet there

It's all up to you. How do you want to advance your nation? Do you want to start of allied with a larger nation or do you want foreign nations to invade your land and split it up amongst themselves as is happening in West Corinthia? do you want to remain inconspicuous for a while or do you want to dive headfirst right into major RP's?

All you need to do is write a little story about how your king came to power, how he treats his people, what groups are fighting his leadership and maybe an appeal for help from a resistance leader.

It's all up to you. How do you want to advance your nation? Do you want to start of allied with a larger nation or do you want foreign nations to invade your land and split it up amongst themselves as is happening in West Corinthia? do you want to remain inconspicuous for a while or do you want to dive headfirst right into major RP's?

All you need to do is write a little story about how your king came to power, how he treats his people, what groups are fighting his leadership and maybe an appeal for help from a resistance leader.

Thank you for your info. Actually, I was thinking of a story or what not. Here is something, note it is graphic and although it does involve rape of a child, it does not imply the King is a pedophile, because I am not doing that plan.

Princess Sophia (need to think of a name later) was only 12 but she was a blockade, a wall to the Prince, Prince Jason.

One day, Sophia was reading a book, sitting on the chair at her desk, simply reading her book. A familiar man came in the room. ''Hello, Jason.'' Sophia said, turning to see her brother at the door. He came in, secretly locking the door and looked at her.

After a brief talk and some time, Jason came out of the room. Inside, was the hanging body of Princess Sophia, her naked body hanging from the ceiling.

Would Jason be caught? Of course not! He framed one of the guards who he killed in order to have the guard blamed. He would get away with killing and raping his other sisters.

I hope this story is an appropiate one to post here. If not, I can get rid of it.

It's all up to you. How do you want to advance your nation? Do you want to start of allied with a larger nation or do you want foreign nations to invade your land and split it up amongst themselves as is happening in West Corinthia? do you want to remain inconspicuous for a while or do you want to dive headfirst right into major RP's?

All you need to do is write a little story about how your king came to power, how he treats his people, what groups are fighting his leadership and maybe an appeal for help from a resistance leader.

I am thinking on how to advance my nation. I am thinking of things like alliances and what not for CI. What is happening in West Corinthia? Let me think on this all.

Thank you for your info. Actually, I was thinking of a story or what not. Here is something, note it is graphic and although it does involve rape of a child, it does not imply the King is a pedophile, because I am not doing that plan.

Princess Sophia (need to think of a name later) was only 12 but she was a blockade, a wall to the Prince, Prince Jason.

One day, Sophia was reading a book, sitting on the chair at her desk, simply reading her book. A familiar man came in the room. ''Hello, Jason.'' Sophia said, turning to see her brother at the door. He came in, secretly locking the door and looked at her.

After a brief talk and some time, Jason came out of the room. Inside, was the hanging body of Princess Sophia, her naked body hanging from the ceiling.

Would Jason be caught? Of course not! He framed one of the guards who he killed in order to have the guard blamed. He would get away with killing and raping his other sisters.

I hope this story is an appropiate one to post here. If not, I can get rid of it.

Also, on the issue of guards being framed, I may change that or something later, if I like this little story or what not.

Thank you for your info, St. Fedski.

I suggest reading intros and histories of nations to see they developed their nations from small things of five million grubby people living in wood huts to the current 7 billion monsterous economic powers living in palaces made of gold silver and jewels.

In the Czar of West Corinthia died leaving a guy named Field Marshal Chenko to retrieve the secret heir, however, once word got out that the Czar died, riots and rebellions broke out over much of the country. Now a number of nations have jumped in either to help the monarchy, the rebels, themselves or just to cause problems.

I suggest reading intros and histories of nations to see they developed their nations from small things of five million grubby people living in wood huts to the current 7 billion monsterous economic powers living in palaces made of gold silver and jewels.

In the Czar of West Corinthia died leaving a guy named Field Marshal Chenko to retrieve the secret heir, however, once word got out that the Czar died, riots and rebellions broke out over much of the country. Now a number of nations have jumped in either to help the monarchy, the rebels, themselves or just to cause problems.

Was my story acceptable? Also, I may consider having the King removed, perhaps having Anastasia in power, I don't know but I have done some reading on the forums.

Also, thank you for the info on West Corinthia.

It's acceptable I guess but you may want to develop it. Add characters, dialogue, and more details. Instead of making it a couple lines, make it a couple paragraphs or more. The ultimate goal of an RP is to have it read like a very good fiction book. You want the readers to feel as though they are there, watching the story unfold themselves. The more detail you add, the more you talk about, the more your characters talk helps create that feeling.

It's acceptable I guess but you may want to develop it. Add characters, dialogue, and more details. Instead of making it a couple lines, make it a couple paragraphs or more. The ultimate goal of an RP is to have it read like a very good fiction book. You want the readers to feel as though they are there, watching the story unfold themselves. The more detail you add, the more you talk about, the more your characters talk helps create that feeling.

Thank you for your info here. Here is another thing then:

Prince Jason walked through the halls of the Palace, some time after he had killed Sophia, it was some time ago. As he walked, he collided into a figure. This figure was Prince John, a young prince and brother of Jason. Jason eyed him and said ''Watch it!'' John eyed him with a look and said ''You should use your own eyes.''

Jason and John went for a walk around the Palace, reaching the gardens. At the fountain, John was looking around when from behind, Jason, who had felt his rage again, grabbed a dagger and slit the young prince's throat, throwing the body in the fountain, the water coated with blood.

Jason simply looked at the dead brother he once had and left. He then went into his room, got a book and began reading, as if nothing had happened.

Now, he had killed and raped his own sister and killed his brother.

OOC:
It looks Ok so far, yes i know the forum mods can be a bit sensitive with "adult" themes i'm sure they wouldn't be too concerned if the actual events are just mentioend and not described, you can always work references of events into the narative perhaps by having others discuss it as rumors or something.

Now of course the question some of us have to ask is: do you have any refference as to where in the world you might be located, not a huge detail at times and it cna be a pain in the arse to figure out unless you have a very strong idea about your nation.

More detail about national images, culture etc cna also help, so far all we have (or all i have seen so please excuss me if i have missed anything) is soem insight into the royal family, what else is there to know about the rest of the nation, is it modern(ish) what sort of racial/cultural back ground do the people have. This sort of stuff doesn't need huge depth but everything helps the flesh out the antion.


While i would hate to step on Saint Fedski's toes, udner certain circumstances the princess might be able to seak sanctuary within Crookfur (my larger mainstream NS nation), although persading the notoriously isolationist govenrment to help her regain the crown would be a whole other abttle (unless the King starts dealing with magic, deamons and stuff or starts on the population, then they might be a bit more willing).

Crookfur is histroically bad and conquering countries, mainly becuase they tend to avoid that kind of battle.

OOC:
It looks Ok so far, yes i know the forum mods can be a bit sensitive with "adult" themes i'm sure they wouldn't be too concerned if the actual events are just mentioend and not described, you can always work references of events into the narative perhaps by having others discuss it as rumors or something.

Now of course the question some of us have to ask is: do you have any refference as to where in the world you might be located, not a huge detail at times and it cna be a pain in the arse to figure out unless you have a very strong idea about your nation.

More detail about national images, culture etc cna also help, so far all we have (or all i have seen so please excuss me if i have missed anything) is soem insight into the royal family, what else is there to know about the rest of the nation, is it modern(ish) what sort of racial/cultural back ground do the people have. This sort of stuff doesn't need huge depth but everything helps the flesh out the antion.


While i would hate to step on Saint Fedski's toes, udner certain circumstances the princess might be able to seak sanctuary within Crookfur (my larger mainstream NS nation), although persading the notoriously isolationist govenrment to help her regain the crown would be a whole other abttle (unless the King starts dealing with magic, deamons and stuff or starts on the population, then they might be a bit more willing).

Crookfur is histroically bad and conquering countries, mainly becuase they tend to avoid that kind of battle.

Thank you for all this info. In this next thing I will write, I will say things like the location. I have done a bit other things as well, I think:

These islands were found by Spanish sailors who were shipwrecked but tooken by the British. Catholicism was the main religion, from the Spanish. Jason had not been enemies with the Catholic Church but during a dispute with a clergyman......

As the faithful prayed the Lord's Prayer, groups of gun wielding troopers marched in, led by an officer. The officer announced ''By order of the King, the only religion in our nation, Catholicism is hereby banned.''.

The people were shocked and the officer motioned to his men. He made his men fire on the people, then his men were let loose on a rampage of murder and rape.

The women and even girls, like 12 year olds were raped, right in the church. The elderly and adults were beaten. Soon, they were fired on and only a few were spared. Those spared were 4 girls, the youngest was 8 and the oldest was 17.

They were tried in court and sentenced to death by hanging. They were tooken to the square and hung. People were a bit shocked that girls, like the 8 year old were being hung.

Now, not even the Church was safe.

Thank you for all this info. In this next thing I will write, I will say things like the location. I have done a bit other things as well, I think:

These islands were found by Spanish sailors who were shipwrecked but tooken by the British. Catholicism was the main religion, from the Spanish. Jason had not been enemies with the Catholic Church but during a dispute with a clergyman......

As the faithful prayed the Lord's Prayer, groups of gun wielding troopers marched in, led by an officer. The officer announced ''By order of the King, the only religion in our nation, Catholicism is hereby banned.''.

The people were shocked and the officer motioned to his men. He made his men fire on the people, then his men were let loose on a rampage of murder and rape.

The women and even girls, like 12 year olds were raped, right in the church. The elderly and adults were beaten. Soon, they were fired on and only a few were spared. Those spared were 4 girls, the youngest was 8 and the oldest was 17.

They were tried in court and sentenced to death by hanging. They were tooken to the square and hung. People were a bit shocked that girls, like the 8 year old were being hung.

Now, not even the Church was safe.

Is this an acceptable story or what not?

It seems interesting, a bit more in terms of descriptive langauge would help it flow a little better but as long as the gneral gist of the events is comming through it works, personally i am the last person to ask about story telling advice i tend to get too involve din ideas and just rush out piles of extremely lumpen text.

As for the general storyline, it might better to include some details on why the King is ordering these sort of things and how is he keeping the soldiers loyal, is he justifying the actions to the populance/army in some way?