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Hordes of these spider like creatures are used by the Dominion of Dragon Emperor. Their various powers are quite useful. All Visorak have the ability to create and climb webs as well as a default paralysis power in their spinners.

There are six known breeds of Visorak.

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Vohtarak Visorak:

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Although not gifted with the power of Fire, Vohtarak spinners can create an extremely painful burning sensation in a target, so bad they cannot concentrate on anything but their suffering. Always aggressive, Vohtarak are capable of making berserker charges during which their outer shell becomes almost completely invulnerable to harm.

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Boggarak Visorak:

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These are the only Visorak whose spinners contain two powers, which can apparently be switched back and forth by the Boggarak. When used underwater, they cause a target to swell up and float to the surface. When used on land, they remove all moisture from a target, reducing it to a pile of dust. Boggarak are also able to create a sonic hum that can transmute solid matter to gas.

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Oohnorak Visorak:

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Oohnorak is not a leader, but a follower, and this species is often used as a living ram when the mechanical Visorak battle rams are not available. Its spinner numbs a foe, making escape impossible. Oohnorak have limited telepathic abilities and are skilled mimics, often imitating a trusted voice to lure a foe into a trap.

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Roporak Visorak:

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Commonly used as spies for the horde, Roporak have the power to blend in with their surroundings, becoming virtually invisible. In battle, they use Rhotuka spinners with a disrupter power that drains energy from its target. Roporak are extremely cautious fighters, preferring to wait until a foe has been weakened by others before striking.

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Keelerak Visorak:

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The most unpredictable of all six breeds, Keelerak will fight fiercely one moment, then disappear to go hunt the next. Their spinners contain an acidic venom that can eat through any substance. The ends of their legs are razor sharp, and Keelerak have been known to leap in the air and whirl at high speed, becoming Visorak "buzzsaws."

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Suukorak Visorak:

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Suukorak are natural tacticians, masters at knowing when to attack and when to withdraw. Their spinner creates a field of electrical energy around a target that slowly shrinks - while the field is in effect, the target cannot escape it. Suukorak also have the ability to slow their life processes down to almost zero, making it extremely difficult for others to detect their presence.

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Notes:

1. A 'spinner' is a star-shaped bio-dart launched from openings in a Visorak's back.
2. Currently, only the Holy Empire of SeaQuest has been granted permission to use the Dominion of Dragon Emperor's Visorak Horde.

The Holy Empire of SeaQuest is honored by the Domion of Dragon Emperor granting us permission to use its Visorak Horde.

OOC: Any comments?

OOC: Any comments?

OOC: Any at all?

I'd say either tone them down/limit them in some way as presently they are slightly 'Uberish'.

I'd say either tone them down/limit them in some way as presently they are slightly 'Uberish'.

Any suggestions as to how? Perhaps make it so that they have to learn their abilities?

Or have to charge abilities, can only use them so many times/time period, if thier concentaration breakes then they fail using ability, have to be fully healthy to use ability, ect.

Concentration? They are mindless bug-like creatures that obey only the mental commands of whomever is in put in charge of them. Of course, they will run out of spinners and have to hunt and eat to replinish their stores. I'll work it out, or do you have specific numbers in mind?

Any comments on their melee abilities?

EDIT: How about I set a max limit of 100-spinners per Visorak? Depending on useage rate and how recently the Visorak has eaten, this number can vary anywhere below that, but no higher than that number.

I'd say 50, but they are your creatures, and as long as not wanked, 100 should be fine.

I'd say 50, but they are your creatures, and as long as not wanked, 100 should be fine.

50 is fine with me for the common Visorak. I'll set the custom versions that I have coming up as those that lead each of the 6 Swarms to 100. That sound okay?

Sounds good.