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The factory

Einhauser
26-07-2005, 21:18
OOC: This is a shortish story im writing to flesh out the description of my factories. This is only part one. Part two will be posted when I get it done.

The jolt of the maglev switching tracks woke John Hottenroth out of his fitful sleep. He opened his eyes, but the sparse, lightless passenger car seemed to look the same whether he had his eyes closed or not. With a groan, he sat up and stretched his aching muscles.

The ride was a long one, taking him, and the other 200 or so other workers crammed into this too-small maglev box, from their homes to one of the major factories running near the core of the planet. Each and every being onboard the train had willingly signed their life away to the Einhauserian government, in exchange for work in the factories. At least, that’s what the government told other nations.

In reality they had been snatched out of their homes in the night, beaten, given a set of course overalls, a helmet, and then pushed into this cramped maglev. Most had no idea where they were going, but John did. He had spent 30 years, longer than most Einhauserian’s lived, working in a mine nearby to a factory. He knew how they worked, how they got their labor forces. And he also knew that when the mine closed, they would come for him. He was right.

A second shift in the direction of the maglev woke even more of the weary workers-to-be from their slumber. The temperature in the cramped room skyrocketed as they approached the doors to the factory. Someone in the back of the car was sobbing, John realized with a start. It had not even occurred to him to cry, what with being so afraid of their destination.

With a clang, the maglev threw on the brakes, and all the workers in the back were thrown forward into the front bulkhead. The huddled men groaned and sweated in the intense heat that seemed to radiate from nowhere at all, but everywhere at once. The big iron door on the left of the room swung open, and silhouetted in the glowing red light were eight Marines.

“On your feet!” yelled the lead Marine. He reached an armored hand inside the car and grabbed the nearest worker by the front of his overalls. With barely a hint of strain he dragged the hapless man out of the maglev and threw him a good eight yards. “Line up behind him in groups of ten! Move!” The other Marines were pitching in now, flinging men in all directions and shouting orders.

After a few more minutes of general harassment, the men had finally lined up into 20 groups of ten. The lead Marine stalked up and down the rows of workers, eyeing each. At least, that’s what John thought he was doing. The armored faceplate didn’t let him see the Marines eyes. Satisfied, the Marine motioned to two of his squad mates to bring forth the shackles, which were chained onto the workers legs.

“My name is Sergeant Ruthford. I am your master, and you are my subjects. You will obey my commands, or you will be killed without regret. You are to follow any instructions the rest of my squad,” he motioned behind him to the rest of the Marines, “as you would obey mine. You will not try to escape, and you will not start any violence.”

“Should you decide to try and rebel,” Ruthford continued, “your entire chain-gang will be killed. Should the entire workforce of this factory rebel, you will be subdued via decimation, and the offending parties family will be fed into the furnaces. Do you understand me?”

A chorus of yeses and whimpers rose from the chained workers. Sergeant Ruthford seemed appeased, so the rest of his squad pulled out their stun-whips and motivated the chain gang to move forward. Ahead of the steadily stumbling knot of men stood an imposing iron door, covered in runes and bolts, and seemingly made of stone.

As they approached, it creaked open and released a gout of sweltering air. The chain gangs shied away from the yawning chasm in the wall, trying to achieve some measure of cool hiding behind each other. A quick snap of Ruthford’s stun-whip got them moving again, but much slower.

They shuffled through and into a long, narrow hallway. On the right wall was a small booth manned by a single bored-looking Marine. Ruthford’s squad herded them up and into lines leading from the booth to the door. As the workers passed the table, the Marine behind it handed each a flask about the size of a small dinner plate.

“This is your flask. You will be issued one ration of water every day. If you loose this flask, you will not get another for an entire year. Once your gang receives their flasks, move to the far end of the hall. There my associates will show you to your dorm while I finish up here.”

Johns line finished first, so they clanked sullenly over to the waiting Marines. “Sir, may I inquire as to when we will be get-“ John began to ask one of the Marines. A mailed fist smashed into his jaw and knocked him, and the rest of the chain-gang, to the ground.

“Speak when spoken to!” ordered the Marine who had knocked him down. John felt his jaw and when his hand came away it was covered in blood. If he was not mistaken, his jaw was also broken. “Move!” yelled the same Marine, firmly planting a kick into John’s ribcage. John bent over double and was dragged along as the rest of the frightened workers picked up the pace.

They made their way through a winding maze of corridors, bulkheads, and security fields until at last they entered a concrete room about ten feet wide by twenty long and five feet high. The walls were cratered and covered in blood and urine, as was the floor. “This is to be your dorm. Move in and get some sleep! You will be woken when your shifts come up.” The three Marines that had escorted the chain gang unsurprisingly did not accompany them into the reeking room. What was surprising was the iron door that slammed across the narrow doorway, and the sound of a heavy bolt being drawn across the door. And just like that, they were alone in the stinking, cramped room.

None of the got any sleep that night, and the sounds of sobbing could be heard even through the two-foot thick concrete walls. The next morning, or at least, John thought it was morning in the pitch-dark cell, the bolt was drawn back and the Marines once again stood silhouetted in the door.

“Up and out! Now! Line up at the flask station to receive your water ration. You will be given more orders then.” The chained men stumbled out into the harsh light of the corridor, and began to make their slow way to the water station.

When they finally reached the table again, the Marine behind the desk poured some filthy, sludgy “water” into their flasks and kicked them out of the way. John stared hesitantly at the foul liquid in his canteen, and then poured a little into his cupped palm. The water was gray in color, with a slight green tinge. His eyes welled with tears, and we lowered his head. It was the cleanest water any of them had ever seen.
Siap
26-07-2005, 21:33
OOC: This is well written and frankly...quite depressing
Einhauser
26-07-2005, 21:37
Why thank you Siap. I wrote it as despressingly as I could.

EDIT: Ok, heres part two. Hope you enjoy.

With a groan the massive iron doors opened, revealing a living hell. Beyond the gaping hole in the wall, John could make out miles upon miles of conveyor belts with chains as thick as a man was tall, and gigantic furnaces as large as some buildings rumored to have been built on ancient terra.

The crack of a stun-whip sent the chain gangs forward into the depressingly hot factory. They shuffled over the pitted stone floor, past rivers of molten metal and large robotic arms. They passed under waterfalls of sparks from the massive arc-welders wielded by construction droids, and slowly began to ascend a steep staircase.

It seemed they climbed that narrow, handrail less staircase for hours, until they finally reached the swaying platform oh so many miles up. It was held aloft by chains so large you could stand in the center of the rings, and overlooked a great deal of the factory. Even from this high position, it was impossible to see the ceiling or any of the walls. This place must run for miles, thought John.

The platform he was on ran in a straight line for about one hundred meters, where it dipped sharply towards the floor far below. The chain gang shuffled to the edge of the hanging construct and stared down into space. Below them huge buckets of molten iron were pulled along by thousands of workers chained similarly to them, and beyond the buckets they could see the tank manufactory.

“All eyes on me!” commanded Ruthford. The men wearily gazed in his direction. Satisfied they were looking, Ruthford began to speak. “This is to be your place of work. You will be working on the assembly lines for the small arms. Do not get any stupid ideas of rebellion in your tiny little minds, because the ammunition is not made here. Follow me to your section of the line.”

Ruthford led them along the platform to the drop off. Just below the razor-sharp edge of the iron ledge was a small cage with a conveyor belt running through the middle. The men stared dumbly down at it, until a Marine shoved one of them over the edge. They all fell with a startled yell, and found themselves in a heap.

“You will make sure that each and every weapon has the proper parts in it. When your shift is over I will return to free you and lead you back to your dorm. See you in 18 hours.” With that, Ruthford walked away from the cage and left his squad to guard them.

John turned to the conveyor belt and began the mind-numbing task of looking at every weapon that rolled by. There must have been a thousand every minute. He looked up to see how the rest of his gang was doing. They had the same sullen expression on their faces as he did, although they lacked the swollen, inflamed jaw.

“Get back to work!” yelled a Marine overhead. John obediently began checking the guns once more. Seconds rolled into minutes, which in turn changed to hours. Periodically, John would drink from his canteen. By the end of his shift it was bone dry.

The gang was startled when a jagged metal ladder fell amidst them. “What are you waiting for? Your shift is over!” When John looked up, Sergeant Ruthford was standing at the head of the ladder. He glared at each of the miserable workers in turn, until he finally snapped his whip. They started up the ladder, and one by one reached the top.

“We will be taking a bit of a different route back to your dorm,” said one of the Marines with a hint of amusement. They forced the men into lines once more and led them back down the stairs. Instead of continuing straight ahead the way they came in, the Marines herded them in the direction of the furnaces. As they struggled along, the air became hotter and hotter, until John could barely breathe. Each intake of oxygen seared his diseased lungs, and made his eyes water.

They passed piles of guns, close combat weapons, and even some civilian gadgets. The farther they walked, the larger the items became. Soon they came across tanks, artillery, and even mechs. Finally, a small hut-like building reared up out of the shimmering air. In its side was a door, which could only lead to the cool warrens under the factory. John would have cried with joy, but his body was so depleted of water from the long walk that he couldn’t.

“Hold up,” ordered Ruthford. The line stopped in place, and several of the men fell down. They were quickly set upon by Marines, kicking and slapping them until they shakily rose to their feet. “If you look to your left, you will see what I brought you here for.”

They turned, and gasped in horror. Piles of bodies soared into the air. Gigantic robotic shovels scooped them by their hundreds and fed them into the nearest furnace. They use the dead for kindling, thought John with horror. This was one part of the factory system he had missed.

“This is what happens to those who die here. They are used to power the machines that run this place and melt the ores that arrive here by maglev. It is inevitable that you will die, and you will become fuel. If you work hard, then that time may be far off. But if you do not, you will be thrown in alive.”

“Now,” he resumed, “through the door and down the stairs. Follow the Marine at the bottom to your dorm. Ill see you tomorrow, bight and early.” With that, Ruthford and his squad peeled off into the oppressively hot factory, and were soon swallowed in a cloud of ash. John followed his gang to the open door, and just before he stumbled down into the dark corridor, he glanced to his left. The factory continued well into the distance, and no walls were visible anywhere.

This truly is hell, thought John moments before the inky blackness below welcomed him.
The Scandinvans
26-07-2005, 21:43
OOC: Intresting sounds a little like a movie I saw a while ago, but the conditions the people lives in where far different and the people weren't enslaved, but were born slaves. Genrally that was a good rp and well though out with few problems in it.
Einhauser
26-07-2005, 21:43
Really? What was the name of the movie?
The Scandinvans
26-07-2005, 21:45
OOC: Don't remebr save that the mine thing was only a part of it and I think it ahd something to do with Star Treck or was similar to it. I think I saw it on an airplane or something.
Kyanges
26-07-2005, 21:54
Star Trek: Nemesis.

The mines were Reman mines where their Romulan masters were just as brutish as those Ein Described. Except, they might kill some Remans for fun...

That might be it if it were a Star Trek Movie.
Einhauser
26-07-2005, 22:33
bump
Kriegorgrad
26-07-2005, 22:44
OoC: Nice piece of writing, kept me far more captivated than many of the established "elite" writers.
Einhauser
26-07-2005, 22:48
Wow, thanks Kriegorgrad. Thats some pretty high praise.

Oh, and the second part of the story is almost done. Ill edit my second post on here to have it near the top.
Kriegorgrad
27-07-2005, 00:12
Wow, thanks Kriegorgrad. Thats some pretty high praise.

Oh, and the second part of the story is almost done. Ill edit my second post on here to have it near the top.

Actually it isn't ;) But this is a nice piece of writing.
Einhauser
27-07-2005, 02:00
bump
Greater Valia
27-07-2005, 02:35
OOC: Wow, this is the first rp here that actually kept me captivated for longer than 4 or 5 minutes. Frankly, I like your writing style than most of the established nations here. I hope to see more quality work from you like this and hope you keep up the good work. (If im not mistaken this is WH40k?)
imported_Illior
27-07-2005, 02:42
OOC: Very Nice, it actually had me not skimming, which is quite amazing, TAG for the next part hopefully...
Einhauser
27-07-2005, 02:58
OOC: Wow, this is the first rp here that actually kept me captivated for longer than 4 or 5 minutes. Frankly, I like your writing style than most of the established nations here. I hope to see more quality work from you like this and hope you keep up the good work. (If im not mistaken this is WH40k?)

Wow, thank you. Its sort of WH40K. My country is based on it, and the Marines are an evolution of the Space Marines.

OOC: Very Nice, it actually had me not skimming, which is quite amazing, TAG for the next part hopefully...

Wow, this story is generating some pretty high praise, especially since I wrote it in about an hour as nothing more than a plot-driver, lol.

I was not planning on putting out more, but perhaps I will... I cant do it now because im at a Flash game design class, but ill start writing again tomorrow.
Einhauser
27-07-2005, 19:39
Bump. Im starting part 3 now.