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There was a eary calm in capitol of Dominicus. The streets were calm, nothing moved. nothing made a sound.

=[Camera
City Bunker num. 234]=
The Bunker was only half full before the guards were forced to close the doors... the creatures had already goten to the door withing 4 hours.

--Bunker Contense--
43 Civilians
15 Guards
4 Van Guard
24 Soldiers

The group was huddled in the back of the room. the Bangs of the creatures were getting louder and louder.

One of the Van Guard walked over to the control pad and typed in a code,

A females automated voice pinged in "Self distruct activated, do you wish to continue."

The vanguard stood up and faced the door...
Suddenly the 14 in Dura-steel door bukeled and a claw broke threw.
The Van guard pressed a button and the camera washed white...

The Neoman Grand Ruler has announced that we need help because we do not have the man power or the tech to go to our homeworld. and we have tried to activate the StarGate but there is something blocking the gate.

We need help and we need someone to go to Rune and unblock the stargate... with little damage to the citiy.

OOc sry for the spelling i will fix it when i get more time...

ooc: so are you looking for a few special forces teams to get in, and open the gate?

(*Laughing* Can't ... stop ... laughing, so ... cheesy, oh ... my sides ... they're ... killing me. *Continues Laughter* Serously needs a better story line. And come up with a more origanal name other then Stargate, come on. Have some dignity man. And secondly the civilians in that room would freak out and stop the gaurds from blowing the base up. If you're gonna rp, rp realisitically.)

(*Laughing* Can't ... stop ... laughing, so ... cheesy, oh ... my sides ... they're ... killing me. *Continues Laughter* Serously needs a better story line. And come up with a more origanal name other then Stargate, come on. Have some dignity man. And secondly the civilians in that room would freak out and stop the gaurds from blowing the base up. If you're gonna rp, rp realisitically.)

OOC: okay a claw just broke threw a door designed to survive a nuklear explosion i dont know about you but i seriously would like to blow up then be ripped to shreds..., and it is a stargat you dumb cun*, also im not good at starting RPs and why dont you go trolling somewhere else

also yes SF teams would be greatly appreciated and there are probebly some surviveing members of the Neoman Military

Draconis Federation - if you don't like the effort you can just stay out of the thread. There is not a single need to be humilitating to another poster.

Neoma- as irritating, patronizing, and inpleasant as DF is being there's no need to curse at them like that.

Honest critique - your spelling does need to be cleaned up - it's generally suggested that you write your post in word/ similar program. And use the spell & grammer checker.

Use description to give your posts the needed atmosphere, don't be afraid to write a long post to get the scene just right.

And don't let people rattle you, some people are just loathesome.

(*Laughing* Can't ... stop ... laughing, so ... cheesy, oh ... my sides ... they're ... killing me. *Continues Laughter* Serously needs a better story line. And come up with a more origanal name other then Stargate, come on. Have some dignity man. And secondly the civilians in that room would freak out and stop the gaurds from blowing the base up. If you're gonna rp, rp realisitically.)

OOC: You do know that several dozen FT nations use StarGates, right? So, you know already you look like a complete gimp for this bit of laughter, right?
And you knew in advance this would be taken to the mods for flaming, right?

Draconis Federation, you should know better. As it is, you're pretty much single-handedly wrecked this player's thread. Neoma, your response was scarcely better.

I'm gonna lock this thread and let you start over, hopefully without the disruptive influence.

~ Frisbeeteria ~
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