NationStates Jolt Archive

All boysfrom the age of 10 will begin basic fire-arms training.Progresing to more advanced lessons in Army training.At the age of 15 the harder boys will then be givin the choice to go into the Gorilaz(the war monkeys equivalent of the S.A.S). There they will recive full S.A.S training.Boys who resist will be forced to go into tatical training..This is where we develop the mind into a tatical brilliance.From the age of 22 they must go into 2 years of milatry service with the option after that to carry on in the Army. All boys with fire-arms training will be called up into the army at times of war nomater there age.

Isn't this a little drastic? Why are you taking away these children's lifes?

All boysfrom the age of 10 will begin basic fire-arms training.Progresing to more advanced lessons in Army training.At the age of 15 the harder boys will then be givin the choice to go into the Gorilaz(the war monkeys equivalent of the S.A.S). There they will recive full S.A.S training.Boys who resist will be forced to go into tatical training..This is where we develop the mind into a tatical brilliance.From the age of 22 they must go into 2 years of milatry service with the option after that to carry on in the Army. All boys with fire-arms training will be called up into the army at times of war nomater there age.
Errors:
A- Grammar
1- boysfrom needs a space in it.
2- fire-arms doesn't need a hyphen.
3- There should be a space after the period at the end of the first sentence.
4- You mispelled given in the second sentence.
5- You mispelled Guerillas in the second sentence.
6- You mispelled receive in the third sentence.
7- You put a second period instead of a space at the end of the third sentence.
8- There should be a space after the period at the end of the fourth sentence.
9- You mispelled military in the fifth sentence.
10- Repeat of Grammar Error 2 in sentence six.
11- nomater needs a space in it.
12- matter is mispelled.
B- RP
1- If your people, even just males, are drafted at age ten, then your military would be well over the reasonable level to maintain. You would not be able to feed, fund, or supply such a force, let alone train and coordinate.
2- Having the males conscripted before they hit puberty cuts reproduction dead in its tracks. So unless you're nation is open to either prostitution or immigrants in mass numbers, your going to hit population zero fast.
3- Such a military development is not provoked so far as anyone can tell. So, unless you are going to go on a war of conquest that you can never hope to win, the buildup is pointless.

This has been a Muktari Class Criticism.

Good for you, I'm considering something similar for my people.

freedoms maan, what about freedoms?

Good for you, I'm considering something similar for my people.

Read Section B of my previous post. It can't work. Kudos on the lack of grammar errors, though.