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After all this time, it's finally UP!

Darknovae
17-09-2006, 01:57
Chapter Two of "PersephoneSkye" is now up on the site! WHOOOOOOOO HOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!! Read it here: Freshwomyn? Home of the WHAT?!?!?! (www.xanga.com/PersephoneSkye)

Yay!
Bumboat
17-09-2006, 03:30
Chapter Two of "PersephoneSkye" is now up on the site! WHOOOOOOOO HOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!! Read it here: Freshwomyn? Home of the WHAT?!?!?! (www.xanga.com/PersephoneSkye)

Yay!

Nice update Pancake! :)
Soviestan
17-09-2006, 03:52
I dont get it
Andaluciae
17-09-2006, 04:13
Very nice, enjoyable read. Proves that so much of Freshman life at high school is universal. The kind of oddities that are involved in that sort of stuff, and teachers with quirks. Like my (late, poor fellow died of skin cancer, and he was so vigilant against "Sat Fat" too) health teacher, who was perpetually high strung, and did this thrumming thing with his cheek when he was teaching class. He was a decent teacher, only health teacher in history actually hired to teach health, and not coach the school's primary sport. But the thrumming thing was so weird. All period long he'd stand there and thrum his cheek. So odd. Look out for oddities in teachers, they can be distracting, or capable of holding your attention.
Darknovae
17-09-2006, 13:27
Very nice, enjoyable read. Proves that so much of Freshman life at high school is universal. The kind of oddities that are involved in that sort of stuff, and teachers with quirks. Like my (late, poor fellow died of skin cancer, and he was so vigilant against "Sat Fat" too) health teacher, who was perpetually high strung, and did this thrumming thing with his cheek when he was teaching class. He was a decent teacher, only health teacher in history actually hired to teach health, and not coach the school's primary sport. But the thrumming thing was so weird. All period long he'd stand there and thrum his cheek. So odd. Look out for oddities in teachers, they can be distracting, or capable of holding your attention.

Yeah, a lot of it IS universal. :eek: My teachers don't have a lot of oddities though.

I'm gald it was a good read, I think the ending was rushed a little but I wanted to end the chapter so I could move on :)
Darknovae
17-09-2006, 14:15
Can somebody give me ideas for chapter Three?
Ashmoria
17-09-2006, 15:05
good job. i enjoyed both chapters. prudence high being the home of the trojans made me laugh. its so very appropriate.

do you know how the story is going to go? i hate to get involved in an ongoing fiction that peters out because the author doesnt have a whole story in mind.

next chapter should maybe be about meeting new people and new cliques. an overview of the social stucture of the school
Darknovae
17-09-2006, 15:07
good job. i enjoyed both chapters. prudence high being the home of the trojans made me laugh. its so very appropriate.

do you know how the story is going to go? i hate to get involved in an ongoing fiction that peters out because the author doesnt have a whole story in mind.

next chapter should maybe be about meeting new people and new cliques. an overview of the social stucture of the school

That's what I was thinking of. Jay's gettign more face time though :)
Ashmoria
17-09-2006, 15:11
That's what I was thinking of. Jay's gettign more face time though :)

as well he should. he can have his own adventure in some boys only situation.
Darknovae
17-09-2006, 15:15
as well he should. he can have his own adventure in some boys only situation.

Perhaps... but he should tell Ginny about it, it's all from her point of view.
Ashmoria
17-09-2006, 15:38
Perhaps... but he should tell Ginny about it, it's all from her point of view.

oh yes. at lunch or afterschool he might relate some horror story of the boys bathroom or locker room. anything from "horror only for him" (undressing in front of other boys) to something that will make every reader cringe (duct taping some other boys buttocks ala 'the breakfast club')

having other characters tell her some of their experiences makes it so that ginny doesnt have to have it all happen to her.
Darknovae
17-09-2006, 15:42
oh yes. at lunch or afterschool he might relate some horror story of the boys bathroom or locker room. anything from "horror only for him" (undressing in front of other boys) to something that will make every reader cringe (duct taping some other boys buttocks ala 'the breakfast club')

having other characters tell her some of their experiences makes it so that ginny doesnt have to have it all happen to her.

Yes... muah ha ha... (I can be extremely evil to my characters... ;))
New Stalinberg
17-09-2006, 15:55
Can somebody give me ideas for chapter Three?

Yes, well rather, it should include some if not all of the following:

Pirates
Sharks
Robots that kill people
Nazis
Snake Plissken
Heads exploding
A Richard Simmons Bot
Dick Cheney and Ted Kennedy in a car chase while drunk and shooting at eachother.

Trust me, they're all good ideas.
Darknovae
17-09-2006, 18:30
Yes, well rather, it should include some if not all of the following:

Pirates
Sharks
Robots that kill people
Nazis
Snake Plissken
Heads exploding
A Richard Simmons Bot
Dick Cheney and Ted Kennedy in a car chase while drunk and shooting at eachother.

Trust me, they're all good ideas.


:rolleyes: It's a high school story.

But then again.... :D