Persephone Skye
17-08-2006, 02:43
Well, since I have persistent writer's block on "Persephone Skye" and "Think of the Children", I came up with several crazy ideas and re-started another story, which was originally called "Inside Looking Out". The original story was about a girl named Rhiannon Bailey who basically feels invisible to the world, and is very shy and introverted. I disconinued it because it basically sucked, but after some roaming around I decided to re-start it and use *some* elements in the other stories.
The original was one novel, and had Rhiannon, an old friend named Mandy, and Rhiannon's sister Amber, with two girls named Maria and Chandra, and a "bad girl" named Ginny, and had a bunch of guys named Evan, Seth, Aiden... and were all Rhiannon's best friends. Well, it sucked, because it was mostly a "parents don't notice me" story, rather than overcoming introverted-ness. the Baileys had been in their town (can't rmember the original name) forever.
The revamped version is a trilogy, and still has Rhiannon and Amber. Mandy became Melinda, I cut out all the guy characters, and had the Baileys only be there for a year, which would enhance Rhiannon's character. I also cut out Ginny, she didn't fit in anywhere. Also Rhiannon went to a strict Christian school, and was bullied there for being different, by a girl named Stephanie Cadence. Rhiannon winds up in a lot of trouble for grades and attitude with her parents, and gets sent to a private school because she is "troubled". When she comes back she's still kind of shy and nothing improves much for her, and then Stephanie Cadence comes back...
Whcih version is better? Could you give me some tips about what happens in the story? I have a good beginning, and I have an ending, I just don't know about the middle. Also I have names for everyone, so don't give me names.
And there is a "companion trilogy" to this, but I have yet to re-start it. It's about Rhiannon's old school, and ivolves the Cadence kids.
And yes, some of this does tie in with Persephone Skye, but not TotC.
The original was one novel, and had Rhiannon, an old friend named Mandy, and Rhiannon's sister Amber, with two girls named Maria and Chandra, and a "bad girl" named Ginny, and had a bunch of guys named Evan, Seth, Aiden... and were all Rhiannon's best friends. Well, it sucked, because it was mostly a "parents don't notice me" story, rather than overcoming introverted-ness. the Baileys had been in their town (can't rmember the original name) forever.
The revamped version is a trilogy, and still has Rhiannon and Amber. Mandy became Melinda, I cut out all the guy characters, and had the Baileys only be there for a year, which would enhance Rhiannon's character. I also cut out Ginny, she didn't fit in anywhere. Also Rhiannon went to a strict Christian school, and was bullied there for being different, by a girl named Stephanie Cadence. Rhiannon winds up in a lot of trouble for grades and attitude with her parents, and gets sent to a private school because she is "troubled". When she comes back she's still kind of shy and nothing improves much for her, and then Stephanie Cadence comes back...
Whcih version is better? Could you give me some tips about what happens in the story? I have a good beginning, and I have an ending, I just don't know about the middle. Also I have names for everyone, so don't give me names.
And there is a "companion trilogy" to this, but I have yet to re-start it. It's about Rhiannon's old school, and ivolves the Cadence kids.
And yes, some of this does tie in with Persephone Skye, but not TotC.