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My Uberpimp Essay

The South Islands
17-10-2005, 02:32
In case any one would like to see it, this is my latest essay. If you see anything, don't be afraid to bring to to my attention.



Socioeconomic Influences on the American “Underdog” Mentality

America, and Americans, has always held an “Underdog” mentality. This mentality began with the early settlers, and evolved with the development of the colonies, and the early United States. With the rise of the middle class in turn of the century America, this mentality has declined in influence to the American psyche. As the growing plurality of middle class Americans began to strive for the upper classes, the underdog mentality became counterproductive. This new attitude towards the underdog is apparent in the legal system. As the American middle class increasingly identifies its economic interests with the upper classes, the culture's diminishing sympathies for the underdog become visible in the legal system.

America began its history as the proverbial underdog. The early European settlers endured enormous hardship in the first few years of life in the American colonies. In the American Revolution, the Americans were again the underdog. They had very little chance of winning their independence from the most powerful empire in the world at that time. Yet they persevered. They became the ultimate underdogs of the enlightenment world.

This underdog mentality was visible in an early Supreme Court case, Fletcher v. Peck. This case dealt with the Contract Clause of the constitution, which states that the States cannot interfere with a legitimate contract. The Georgia legislature, with many legislators bribed, sold seventy five million acres of land west of the Yazoo River to a group of land speculators for far below market price. Many citizens were outraged. Some residents of Augusta “actually marched on the capital, determined to lynch the corrupt lawmakers” (Irons 113). After the next election, where almost all incumbents ejected, the new legislature nullified the contract. By now, the initial companies that purchased the land had sold it, the land now being in the hands of mostly farmers. With the land now divided into small parcels in the hands of farmers, this could perceived as the big bad government, “the Man”, against the small farmers, just trying to scrape a living off their land that they had bought legitimately. When the Supreme Court struck down the nullification of the contract, it was seen as a victory by the underdog, persevering through legal troubles, to make a living for himself.

As the new United States expanded westward, the underdog mentality went westward, as well. The new settlers of the west considered themselves underdogs just as the early European colonists did. They endured hardships, ranging from disease, to weather, to Indian attack. They were the new underdogs of America.

Then, near the turn of the century, things began to change. Americans began to lose the underdog mentality that had so defined their forefathers. People began having less sympathy for the struggle of the underdog against the “Man”. The primary reason for this diminishing underdog mentality in the American psyche was the rise of the middle class.

With the rise of the middle class, the middle managers and the supervisors, there was little room for the underdog mentality. Previously, the primary goal of the majority of people was to rise from the lower class to the middle class. Now, with the increasing numbers of the middle class, the goal was to rise from the middle class to the upper class, the owners and presidents. To facilitate this, the previous underdogs had to become the “Man”. There rise to the upper class could ill afford the interference of an economic underdog.

While this shift mainly influenced personal values, it also influenced the American legal system, and the perception of its rulings. The prime example of this is the infamous McDonalds “Hot Coffee” case, where an older woman won 2.9 million dollars after she suffered 3rd degree burns on her groin and thighs from an abnormally hot cup of coffee. This woman was an eighty-year-old retired department store clerk, a stereotypical underdog, going against the “Man” of the McDonalds Corporation. However, “Public opinion (was) squarely on the side of McDonalds. Polls (had) shown a large majority of Americans… to be outraged at the verdict” (Gerlin A8).

While the underdog attitude that defined American life in the past is certainly not dead, it is diminished. The “Man” is no longer the big, bad organization that we strive against; it is who provides for us. We, the middle class, have forgotten our roots in the working class. Instead of striving against the “Man”, we work for him, all in the name of a better life. While striving for a better life is admirable, it is certainly not worth the cost of our origins.
H N Fiddlebottoms VIII
17-10-2005, 02:39
Good, I suppose. I'm mainly dissapointed because I expected the essay to be about how the Uberpimp would eventually rise over the Unterpimp through the inevitablity of superior genetics.
I am very dissapointed, and when I get dissapointed, people tend to die within the next 7 or 8 decades.
Spartiala
17-10-2005, 02:58
Socioeconomic Influences on the American “Underdog” Mentality

America, and Americans, has always held an “Underdog” mentality.delete the phrase "and Americans". Its unnecessary and makes the word "has" sound incorrect This mentality began with the early settlers, and evolved with the development of the colonies, and the early United States. With the rise of the middle class in turn of the century America, this mentality has declined in influence to the American psyche.That sentence sounds kind of unclear. You might want to try rewording it As the growing plurality of middle class Americans began to strive for the upper classes, the underdog mentality became counterproductive. This new attitude towards the underdog is apparent in the legal system. As the American middle class increasingly identifies its economic interests with the upper classes, the culture's diminishing sympathies for the underdog become visible in the legal system.

America began its history as the proverbial underdog. The early European settlers endured enormous hardship in the first few years of life in the American colonies. In the American Revolution, the Americans were again the underdog. They had very little chance of winning their independence from the most powerful empire in the world at that time. Yet they persevered. Yet is a conjunction and traditionally is not to be used at the beginning of a sentence. The way you used it is perfectly acceptable in casual writing, but if the person marking your paper is very strict you might lose marks. They became the ultimate underdogs of the enlightenment world.

This underdog mentality was visible in an early Supreme Court case, Fletcher v. Peck.I'm not sure about that comma. You might want to replace it with a colon This case dealt with the Contract Clause of the constitution, which states that the States cannot interfere with a legitimate contract. "states that the States" sounds kind of funny. Try changing "states" to "says" The Georgia legislature, with many legislators bribed, sold seventy five million acres of land west of the Yazoo River to a group of land speculators for far below market price. Many citizens were outraged. Some residents of Augusta “actually marched on the capital, determined to lynch the corrupt lawmakers” (Irons 113). After the next election, where almost all incumbents ejected, the new legislature nullified the contract. By now, the initial companies that purchased the land had sold it, the land now being in the hands of mostly farmers. change to "mostly in the hands of farmers" With the land now divided into small parcels in the hands of farmers, this could perceived as the big bad government, “the Man”, against the small farmers, just trying to scrape a living off their land that they had bought legitimately. When the Supreme Court struck down the nullification of the contract, it was seen as a victory by the underdog, persevering through legal troubles, to make a living for himself. SEXIST WRITING! SEXIST WRITING! On the other hand, if you changed it to "himself or herself" you might need to change underdog to "underdog or underbitch". Maybe its better to just assume the underdog is a male.

As the new United States expanded westward, the underdog mentality went westward, as well. The new settlers of the west considered themselves underdogs just as the early European colonists did. They endured hardships, ranging from disease, to weather, to Indian attack. Is "Indian" considered a racial slur? I'm never too sure on that. They were the new underdogs of America.

Then, near the turn of the century, things began to change. Americans began to lose the underdog mentality that had so defined their forefathers. People began having less sympathy for the struggle of the underdog against the “Man”. The primary reason for this diminishing underdog mentality in the American psyche was the rise of the middle class.

With the rise of the middle class, the middle managers and the supervisors, there was little room for the underdog mentality. Previously, the primary goal of the majority of people was to rise from the lower class to the middle class. Now, with the increasing numbers of the middle class, the goal was to rise from the middle class to the upper class, the owners and presidents. Change to "upper class: the owners and presidents" To facilitate this, the previous underdogs had to become the “Man”. There rise to the upper class could ill afford the interference of an economic underdog. Change "There" to "Their"

While this shift mainly influenced personal values, it also influenced the American legal system, and the perception of its rulings. The prime example of this is the infamous McDonalds “Hot Coffee” case, where an older woman won 2.9 million dollars after she suffered 3rd degree burns on her groin and thighs from an abnormally hot cup of coffee. This woman was an eighty-year-old retired department store clerk, a stereotypical underdog, going against the “Man” of the McDonalds Corporation. However, “Public opinion (was) squarely on the side of McDonalds. Polls (had) shown a large majority of Americans… to be outraged at the verdict” (Gerlin A8).

While the underdog attitude that defined American life in the past is certainly not dead, it is diminished. The “Man” is no longer the big, bad organization that we strive against; it is who provides for us. We, the middle class, have forgotten our roots in the working class. Instead of striving against the “Man”, we work for him, all in the name of a better life. While striving for a better life is admirable, it is certainly not worth the cost of our origins

I pointed out a few grammatical slips I noticed, but keep in mind that I could be wrong about some of them. Overall an excellent paper. Very interesting too. What class is it for?
Undelia
17-10-2005, 03:00
Good, I suppose. I'm mainly dissapointed because I expected the essay to be about how the Uberpimp would eventually rise over the Unterpimp through the inevitablity of superior genetics.
I am very dissapointed, and when I get dissapointed, people tend to die within the next 7 or 8 decades.
lol. (something I usually don't do)

About the essay, emotionalist bullshit. I’m sure your instructor will love it.
The South Islands
17-10-2005, 03:02
It's a standard freshman writing class, but with a juducial theme.

thanks alot, I apreciate it.
Heron-Marked Warriors
17-10-2005, 03:02
In case any one would like to see it, this is my latest essay. If you see anything, don't be afraid to bring to to my attention.

well, first thing that's wrong, you did not use any of my suggestions for the oppostition to the underdog. Your ancestors were genetically deficient.

Second thing, that came before the first thing, is in bold in the quote at the top. Should say it to, not to to. Ballet fetish, have we?

Third thing: your first use of the man appears as "the Man". All others are the "Man". Strive for consisitency.


And, although I have no idea what I just read, it didn't make me want to hurt you in any way,so that's good work:D
Spartiala
17-10-2005, 03:10
Second thing, that came before the first thing, is in bold in the quote at the top. Should say it to, not to to. Ballet fetish, have we?


Also, it should read "If you see anything wrong". Otherwise, it sounds like if I see anything at all I should bring it to his attention. "Hey The South Islands! I see a computer monitor! And a watch! And some paper! And a hat!
The South Islands
19-10-2005, 01:56
BUMP for at least one more edit.
Bahamamamma
19-10-2005, 02:12
I liked your point, but am unclear about the popular reaction to the hot coffee case in any way demonstrating a shift in our underdog identity. As far as I have been able to tell, most people's opposition to the hot coffee verdict was based on the fact that coffee is suppossed to be hot and not on some appreciation for the corporation itself. Anyway, the verdict didn't stand - of course you know that. And finally, what about the 12 americans who heard the facts and rendered the award? Were they simply an anomaly?

You had me until the end. At the end of your piece it felt like you were trying to meet a page or word quota.