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I've made a proposal to the WA concerning terrorism which may interest some regions. It still needs some support, so any help would be appreciated.
I should clarify that the proposal doesn't state anything about armed forces to eliminate terrorism by force, it's merely an exchange of intelligence information. The content is as follows:

The World Assembly,
WORRIED about the growing attacks of terrorism all along the regions and nations of NationStates,
NOTING WITH DEEP CONCERN the military incapability to solve this issue,
HAVING STUDIED the implications of a new organism of the World Assembly (WA),
KNOWING that a significant advantage of terrorist groups is the possibility to move swiftly leaving poor, or none at all, traces of their movements,
HAVING CONSIDERED the advantages of the exchange of crucial information relating terrorism in order to employ military strength at strategic moments and positions;
1. INSTITUTES the Network of Intelligence and International Cooperation for Counter-Terrorism (NICCT), or Counter-Terrorism Network,which primarily functions will be to:
a. Receive information from any party member referring to terrorist movements, attacks, telegrams, encampments and any other aspect relative to dangerous terrorist groups,
b. Supply every party member with hourly updated reports containing the information received according to clause 1, subclause a;
2. DELEGATES a Counter-Terrorism Council within the WA to regulate the administration of information of the NICCT;
3. DECLARES ACCORDINGLY that the NICCT will be funded by a 0.2% of the WA budget and by the party members and/or any other willing nations;
4. FURTHER DECLARES that the NICCT will work in regional cores for the acceleration and facilitation of the exchange process;
5. FURTHER DECLARES that the functions of the NICCT will be limited to those pointed in clause 1, although they will be expanded at the moment of the creation of an organic reglament;
6. SUGGESTS the new NICCT to maintain the exchanged information strictly public among its member nations by including in the hourly reports any classified information supplied;
7. DECIDES to remain actively seized of the matter until the first declarations of the first president of the NICCT.

I've made a proposal to the WA concerning terrorism which may interest some regions. It still needs some support, so any help would be appreciated.
I should clarify that the proposal doesn't state anything about armed forces to eliminate terrorism by force, it's merely an exchange of intelligence information.
Not a bad idea, reasonably well worked-out. I wish you had posted it here before submission, because then we could have ironed out some of the language (OOC: I take it from some of the "interesting" phrases that English isn't your first language? Congratulations on getting something as technical as a proposal on terrorism so nearly right!). If you don't get it through this time, you might want to think about a few things in your redraft.

The World Assembly,
WORRIED about the growing attacks of terrorism all along the regions and nations of NationStates,
NOTING WITH DEEP CONCERN the military incapability to solve this issue,
HAVING STUDIED the implications of a new organism of the World Assembly (WA),
I think you meant 'organisation' rather than 'organism'.

KNOWING that a significant advantage of terrorist groups is the possibility to move swiftly leaving poor, or none at all, traces of their movements,
HAVING CONSIDERED the advantages of the exchange of crucial information relating terrorism in order to employ military strength at strategic moments and positions;
1. INSTITUTES the Network of Intelligence and International Cooperation for Counter-Terrorism (NICCT), or Counter-Terrorism Network,which primarily functions will be to:
"whose primary functions..." Also more trivially, NICCT? Not NIICCT?
a. Receive information from any party member referring to terrorist movements, attacks, telegrams, encampments and any other aspect relative to dangerous terrorist groups,
b. Supply every party member with hourly updated reports containing the information received according to clause 1, subclause a;
"Party" members? Where did this party come from? Are there free drinks?

Seriously, this makes the whole proposal ambiguous. Are all member nations of the WA expected to contribute information to the NICCT? Do only those who contribute get updates? Also, why hourly updates, when the world may go months without any information to update with?

2. DELEGATES a Counter-Terrorism Council within the WA to regulate the administration of information of the NICCT;
Um. I'm in favour of bureaucracy and all, but creating a committee to oversee the other committee you've created seems a bit excessive. You do realise that under WA rules, no national representatives will ever be on this Counter-Terrorism Council, don't you?

3. DECLARES ACCORDINGLY that the NICCT will be funded by a 0.2% of the WA budget and by the party members and/or any other willing nations;
0.2% of bugger all is still bugger all, I'm afraid. I'm very much against putting fixed figures like this into proposals, because they imply that we know exactly how much the NICCT will cost and that this figure will always be enough for it. In reality, neither of those statements are true. I suggest omitting the figure, and just saying that the NICCT will be funded from the WA budget and from donations.

Having said that, donations are a mine-field, particularly when it comes to organisations dealing with international security. Take a look at the last few proposals to come to vote; they've all taken some care to avoid donors being able to dictate what the organisation does.

4. FURTHER DECLARES that the NICCT will work in regional cores for the acceleration and facilitation of the exchange process;
OOC: This is treading awfully close to metagaming. The WA has no power over regions. This is probably OK (looks around hopefully for a moderator), but I wouldn't try to push it any further.

5. FURTHER DECLARES that the functions of the NICCT will be limited to those pointed in clause 1, although they will be expanded at the moment of the creation of an organic reglament;
I think this is redundant. WA committees like the NICCT can do only what the resolutions that refer to them say that they can do. A future resolution could add to the NICCT's duties (which I think the last part of that sentence is trying to allow), but until then the NICCT can only do what's in clause 1.

6. SUGGESTS the new NICCT to maintain the exchanged information strictly public among its member nations by including in the hourly reports any classified information supplied;
Dear Deity Of Choice, no! You do not go around declassifying information like that unless you want to get your information sources killed!

7. DECIDES to remain actively seized of the matter until the first declarations of the first president of the NICCT.
I'm not at all clear what you mean by this.

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Cerys Coch, Permanent Undersecretary