NationStates Jolt Archive

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- Rhomanoi

THESE United Nations:

DETERMINED to fight corruption in all its forms across the NationStates World.

ACKNOWLEDGING the hard work of all Member States in fighting corruption within and outside their borders through peaceable means.

ENVISAGING a world free from corruption as the best place for future generations as yet untold to develop and grow.

HEREBY enacts the “Anti-Corruption Convention” to these ends.

1) DEFINES “corruption” as being the practice of handing any public office over to an individual because of close personal or financial ties; using financial incentives to bribe legislators, bureaucrats, members of the executive, members of the judiciary or other officials to perform tasks contrary to the law of the land, or to the law of these United Nations enshrined in the Resolutions; manipulating ballots of any kind to produce results favourable to one particular party, organization or individual; diverting public funds from their intended purposes to purposes of personal gain – either direct personal gain or gain of a body with which the person is associated and the manipulation of statistics or data of any kind to produce deliberately misleading information to be disseminated for an illegal objective.

2) DECLARES all activities in the above clause to be illegal.

3) INSTRUCTS all Member States to work to eradicate corruption in all its forms, both enumerated in this Convention and enumerated in national bodies of law, through their indigenous legal channels.

4) CREATES the United Nations Anti-Corruption Commission (U.N.A.C.C.) to co-operate international efforts to stamp out corruption, and to work on eliminating corruption through direct involvement with security forces in Member States.

5) ENUMERATES powers to close down operations deemed to be to corrupt to be salvaged, issue arrest warrants for notoriously corrupt persons in tandem with national security forces and invoke political, diplomatic and legal sanctions against Member States found to be non-compliant with U.N.A.C.C. activities to the U.N.A.C.C.

6) INSTRUCTS Member States to co-operate with the activities of the U.N.A.C.C. and provide whatever assistance they can to the activities of the Commission.

7) URGES the General Assembly to consider revision of the provisions of this Convention periodically.

8) NOTES that some nations have hereditary leadership posts, and does not seek to cover these posts.

9) CONDEMNS all those who participate in corruption the world over, and re-assures those who have suffered because of corruption that the United Nations and its Member States are working to relieve their suffering.

THIS being the will of these United Nations and all Member States there entailed.

Are we allowed to note objections to the content as well?

Are we allowed to note objections to the content as well?

Yes, you are - so long as it's constructive!

Yes, you are - so long as it's constructive!

Damn.

*puts down "stop screwing around with national political systems" sign*

Well...uh...yeah.

I really think you could use a better acronym there. Make it funny.

You have our support.

Mathieu Vergniaud
Deputy Speaker to the UN

Sheik Nadnerb bin Cluich hangs a banner along a wall of the assembly hall:

Stop Screwing Around With National Political Systems

Handy dandy distiller time. Let's look at what this reslution does. It defines corruption and tries to eliminate it.

Does this issue cross national borders? It might rabbit, it might.
Does this issue involve a fundamental human right? Not really.
Does this issue assume specific models of government? Not really.

Unfortunately, there are a whole lot of "corrupt" governments who are members and deligates in the UN. Come to think of it, I'm "corrupt" by your standards, as I have given a number of positions to my "friends" because I knew their qualifications. Why I have relatives as close advisors. (It's in the issues so it has to be true!) Therefore I must opose this resolution.

Shame too, because I almost like it. :p

The government of Cluichstan, too, would be considered corrupt according to the definition in this proposal, as all high-ranking officials are drawn from the same clan. So under this proposal, the entire Cluichstani government would be deemed illegal? Pah!

Respectfully,
Sheik Nadnerb bin Cluich
Cluichstani Ambassador to the UN

OOC: On an OOC level, I like this idea - precisely because on an IC level, Gruenberg would oppose it. Also, dunno if this (http://www.unodc.org/pdf/crime/convention_corruption/signing/Convention-e.pdf) (it's a PDF) would be helpful.

IC:
1) DEFINES “corruption” as being the practice of handing any public office over to an individual because of close personal or financial ties;
Illegal: ideological ban on monarchy.

using financial incentives to bribe legislators, bureaucrats, members of the executive, members of the judiciary or other officials to perform tasks contrary to the law of the land, or to the law of these United Nations enshrined in the Resolutions;
"international law" would be better than the rather cumbersome final clause; otherwise seems ok - just unnecessarily verbose.

manipulating ballots of any kind to produce results favourable to one particular party, organization or individual;
I think you mean "wrongfully" or "illegally" manipulating. Because otherwise this sounds to me like a description of voting.

diverting public funds from their intended purposes to purposes of personal gain – either direct personal gain or gain of a body with which the person is associated and the manipulation of statistics or data of any kind to produce deliberately misleading information to be disseminated for an illegal objective.
The grammar of this is awkward. I think you're talking about two separate things, but the division is not obvious. Either way, the first part - though noble - seems too vague.

4) CREATES the United Nations Anti-Corruption Commission (U.N.A.C.C.) to co-operate international efforts to stamp out corruption, and to work on eliminating corruption through direct involvement with security forces in Member States.
You mean either "co-operate with" or "coordinate"; as it stands, your sentence makes little sense. I'd also like the latter half to specify this "direct involvement" must only take place when requested.

5) ENUMERATES powers to close down operations deemed to be to corrupt to be salvaged, issue arrest warrants for notoriously corrupt persons in tandem with national security forces and invoke political, diplomatic and legal sanctions against Member States found to be non-compliant with U.N.A.C.C. activities to the U.N.A.C.C.
No.

OOC: I love it. Would make for a very interesting RP, potentially.

7) URGES the General Assembly to consider revision of the provisions of this Convention periodically.
Illegal: resolutions may not be amended. Either strike this line, or say something like "URGES all Member States to continue to persevere in all international efforts to combat corruption", which sort of implies there could be another resolution.

8) NOTES that some nations have hereditary leadership posts, and does not seek to cover these posts.
Well it's a bit late to say that. Such a clause is very confusing, because although I assume you're talking about monarchies, what about other hereditary non-leadership posts? Some nations have a "House of Lords" idea, for example.

9) CONDEMNS all those who participate in corruption the world over, and re-assures those who have suffered because of corruption that the United Nations and its Member States are working to relieve their suffering.
Fluff. Strike out the second half; it makes me want to hurl.

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