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UNWFP
A resolution to improve worldwide human and civil rights.

Category: Human Rights
Strength: Strong
Proposed by: Palixia

Description: ASSUMING nearly 800 million people live below the poverty line it becomes time to establish a United Nation World Food Program

VITCIMS of natural disasters like tsunamis, floods, earthquakes or Hurricanes or people who life below the poverty line should be helped

DISPLACED People - both refugees and internally displaced persons to leave towns and villages.

THE world's hungry poor, trapped in a twilight zone between poverty and malnutrition.

THE UNWFP also believes that women are the first solution to hunger and poverty. Women not only cook food. They sow, reap and harvest it. Yet, in many developing countries, they eat last and least.

RESCUE: THE UNWFP should stand on a permanent state of alert, ready to mobilise food aid for delivery to natural and man-made disaster areas.

RAPID Reaction:The UNWFP should have a rapid response team draws-up contingency plans designed to move food and humanitarian aid fast into disaster areas.
rhe UNWFP should works closely with the other members of the UN family, governments and NGOs, offering its logistics expertise to guarantee the delivery of all kinds of humanitarian aid.

REHAB:the UNWFP food aid should also serves as a means to get disaster-affected regions back on their feet.

DETERRENCE: Malnutrition gnaws away at the most valuable asset in any country's development: its children and its workers. Food aid is one of the most effective deterrents against long-term poverty.

Voting Ends: Mon Sep 5 2005

Good goals, but needs to be rewritten. As currently worded, you're proposal does absolutely nothing.

As currently worded, you're proposal does absolutely nothing.RESCUE: THE UNWFP should stand on a permanent state of alert, ready to mobilise food aid for delivery to natural and man-made disaster areas.

RAPID Reaction:The UNWFP should have a rapid response team draws-up contingency plans designed to move food and humanitarian aid fast into disaster areas.
The UNWFP should works closely with the other members of the UN family, governments and NGOs, offering its logistics expertise to guarantee the delivery of all kinds of humanitarian aid.

REHAB:the UNWFP food aid should also serves as a means to get disaster-affected regions back on their feet.Is all this "nothing"?

ASSUMING nearly 800 million people live below the poverty line it becomes time to establish a United Nation World Food Program

On what are you basing that assumption? It sounds like a RL reference, which is problematic. In any case, 'ACKNOWLEDGING that too many people live below the poverty line' owtte might make more sense.

VITCIMS

I know it's petty. But spelling mistakes always hamper a proposal's passage.

DISPLACED People - both refugees and internally displaced persons to leave towns and villages.

This doesn't really mean anything in isolation. Maybe you should put 'DEFINING 'displaced people' as...' - but why bother? You don't refer to them at any other point.

THE world's hungry poor, trapped in a twilight zone between poverty and malnutrition.

Moving stuff. But...apropos what? Also, no need for 'THE' to be capitalised - it's not indicative/operative language.

THE UNWFP also believes that women are the first solution to hunger and poverty. Women not only cook food. They sow, reap and harvest it. Yet, in many developing countries, they eat last and least.

1. No offence, but WHAT THE FUCK?
2. Equalising gender rights has been covered by other resolutions.

RESCUE: THE UNWFP should stand on a permanent state of alert, ready to mobilise food aid for delivery to natural and man-made disaster areas.

RAPID Reaction:The UNWFP should have a rapid response team draws-up contingency plans designed to move food and humanitarian aid fast into disaster areas.
rhe UNWFP should works closely with the other members of the UN family, governments and NGOs, offering its logistics expertise to guarantee the delivery of all kinds of humanitarian aid.

REHAB:the UNWFP food aid should also serves as a means to get disaster-affected regions back on their feet.

DETERRENCE: Malnutrition gnaws away at the most valuable asset in any country's development: its children and its workers. Food aid is one of the most effective deterrents against long-term poverty.

Ok, you should set this out more clearly. Perhaps 'DEFINES approved courses of action for the UNWFP as:' and then number or letter R, RR, R and D. Otherwise, it's very unclear. 'draws-up' should become 'draw up'; 'rhe' should become '^p The'; 'works' should become 'work'; 'serves' should become 'serve'. Beyond that, the 'should' (ironing) is unclear - use operative language.

Overall, I find this proposal to be very poorly composed and presented. I agree with many of the ideas in it, but could not support it in its present state.

Is all this "nothing"?

Yes, nothing.

Saying something "should" be done doesn't actually get it done. This proposal as written is a series of forceless suggestions.

Edit: Also, it may be illegal if that 800 million people below the poverty line stat came from RL, and I don't know where else it could have come from.

UNWFP
A resolution to improve worldwide human and civil rights.

Category: Human Rights
Strength: Strong
Proposed by: Palixia

Description: ASSUMING nearly 800 million people live below the poverty line it becomes time to establish a United Nation World Food Program

VITCIMS of natural disasters like tsunamis, floods, earthquakes or Hurricanes or people who life below the poverty line should be helped

DISPLACED People - both refugees and internally displaced persons to leave towns and villages.

THE world's hungry poor, trapped in a twilight zone between poverty and malnutrition.

THE UNWFP also believes that women are the first solution to hunger and poverty. Women not only cook food. They sow, reap and harvest it. Yet, in many developing countries, they eat last and least.

RESCUE: THE UNWFP should stand on a permanent state of alert, ready to mobilise food aid for delivery to natural and man-made disaster areas.

RAPID Reaction:The UNWFP should have a rapid response team draws-up contingency plans designed to move food and humanitarian aid fast into disaster areas.
rhe UNWFP should works closely with the other members of the UN family, governments and NGOs, offering its logistics expertise to guarantee the delivery of all kinds of humanitarian aid.

REHAB:the UNWFP food aid should also serves as a means to get disaster-affected regions back on their feet.

DETERRENCE: Malnutrition gnaws away at the most valuable asset in any country's development: its children and its workers. Food aid is one of the most effective deterrents against long-term poverty.

Voting Ends: Mon Sep 5 2005

I would agree with Omigodtheykilledkenny, that this does indeed proport to accomplish a great deal and I'm sure that if implemented it will. Nevertheless, before I vote for it, I would like the following questions answered:

1). Providing aid in light of natural disastors is fine, but it is a rather reactive measure in the case of prolonged famine. Surely developmental goals and funding, with a U.N. agency devoted to the advancement of better farming and manufacturing techniques, would perform the job better?

2). The comments about the role of women strike me as somewhat sexist, even acknowledging, as they do, an existing situation. In addition, simply favouring women will be impracticle, given local culture and traditions that emphsise male predominance. Wouldn't goals at making sure everyone is able to enjoy adaquate nourishment during a time of famine be more constructive?

3). Food aid is of debatable use as a weapon against long term poverty, as it does not solve the underlying problem of poor production. What are you're solutions for that issue?

May the blessings of our otters be upon you all (and your corporate sponsors).

Leonard Otterby
Ambassador for the Republic of Compadria to the U.N.

I don't belive this proposal covers anything left unmentioned in previous proposals. In addition, it's riddled with spelling errors and assertions with no clarification or action. On top of all that, it never even explains what the UNWFP is attempting to do and how. I suggest the author take a look at past resolutions concerning world hunger, and the steps taken to fix the problem already.
VITCIMS of natural disasters like tsunamis, floods, earthquakes or Hurricanes or people who life below the poverty line should be helped
Yeah, they should be helped, and they are being helped, Resolutions #29, 90 and 100. Your proposal doesn't suggest anyway to help them though.
DISPLACED People - both refugees and internally displaced persons to leave towns and villages.
THE world's hungry poor, trapped in a twilight zone between poverty and malnutrition.
This is meaningless on its own. You need to provide ways of helping people. Besides just saying, 'This is bad' you need to suggest ways of improvement. It's already covered by Resolutions #20, 51, 65, 92 and 111
RESCUE: THE UNWFP should stand on a permanent state of alert, ready to mobilise food aid for delivery to natural and man-made disaster areas.
Again, a system for that is already in place, Resolution #29.
RAPID Reaction:The UNWFP should have a rapid response team draws-up contingency plans designed to move food and humanitarian aid fast into disaster areas.
REHAB:the UNWFP food aid should also serves as a means to get disaster-affected regions back on their feet.
That's wonderful, but how will any of it be accomplished? Resolutions #29, 42, 76 and 114.

I personally don't see how I could support this proposal in any imanginable form. It's redundant, and lacks alot of much needed clarification.

ACKNOWLEDGING nearly 800 million people live below the poverty line it becomes time to establish a United Nation World Food Program

VICTIMS of natural disasters like tsunamis, floods, earthquakes or Hurricanes or people who life below the poverty line should be helped

DEFINING Displaced People as - both refugees and internally displaced persons to leave towns and villages.

ALLOWING Displaced people as set in the above definition be helped by this UNWFP

THE world's hungry poor, trapped in a twilight zone between poverty and malnutrition.

RESCUE: THE UNWFP shall stand on a permanent state of alert, ready to mobilize food aid for delivery to natural and man-made disaster areas.

RAPID Reaction: The UNWFP should have a rapid response team draws-up contingency plans designed to move food and humanitarian aid fast into disaster areas.
The UNWFP should works closely with the other members of the UN family, governments and NGOs, offering its logistics expertise to guarantee the delivery of all kinds of humanitarian aid.

REHAB: the UNWFP food aid shall also serves as a means to get disaster-affected regions back on their feet.

DETERRENCE: Malnutrition gnaws away at the most valuable asset in any country's development: its children and its workers. Food aid is one of the most effective deterrents against long-term poverty.

AIDING nations that are or are close to having over 35% of ther population at or below the poverty line.

PLACING food stations in the nations that are or are close to having over 35% of ther population at or below the poverty line.

1. The overall point of the UNWFP is to aid nations in poverty.

Here is a new version made from your suggestions...

Also I checked the spelling errors... Maybe it's better...

ACKNOWLEDGING nearly 800 million people live below the poverty line it becomes time to establish a United Nation World Food Program

Again, where is this figure from? If it's a RL reference, it should be excluded. And I assume it's a United Nations World Food Program.

VICTIMS of natural disasters like tsunamis, floods, earthquakes or Hurricanes or people who life below the poverty line should be helped

1. Why?
2. Why should the UN provide this help?

DEFINING Displaced People as - both refugees and internally displaced persons to leave towns and villages.

Lose the dash. And you can't define 'displaced people' as 'displaced persons'.

ALLOWING Displaced people as set in the above definition be helped by this UNWFP

This is very awkward. Maybe 'DECLARES that the UNWFP shall provide all necessary help for displaced people'. You might also need to expand on the form of aid.

THE world's hungry poor, trapped in a twilight zone between poverty and malnutrition.

WHAT IS THE POINT OF THIS?

RESCUE: THE UNWFP shall stand on a permanent state of alert, ready to mobilize food aid for delivery to natural and man-made disaster areas.

RAPID Reaction: The UNWFP should have a rapid response team draws-up contingency plans designed to move food and humanitarian aid fast into disaster areas.
The UNWFP should works closely with the other members of the UN family, governments and NGOs, offering its logistics expertise to guarantee the delivery of all kinds of humanitarian aid.

REHAB: the UNWFP food aid shall also serves as a means to get disaster-affected regions back on their feet.

DETERRENCE: Malnutrition gnaws away at the most valuable asset in any country's development: its children and its workers. Food aid is one of the most effective deterrents against long-term poverty.

But what do all these mean? There are still grammatical errors, but more importantly, you don't actually define what any of this actually refers to.

AIDING nations that are or are close to having over 35% of ther population at or below the poverty line.

1. 'Their'
2. How?
3. Why?
4. What are you defining as 'the poverty line'?

PLACING food stations in the nations that are or are close to having over 35% of ther population at or below the poverty line.

1. The overall point of the UNWFP is to aid nations in poverty.

But...you've just mentioned disaster areas. Look at Katrina: that hit the richest country in the world. This seems a split in definition.

Honestly, it still doesn't really look like you know how to set out a resolution. My suggestion would be to put together all your reasons, and out them in first: 'RECALLING'; 'BELIEVING'; 'AWARE OF', and so on. Then get together what you want to do - 'DEFINES'; 'DECLARES'; 'RECOMMENDS' - and set them out in a way that everyone can understand. As it stands, this is too muddled to gain our support.

UNWFP
A resolution to improve worldwide human and civil rights.

Category: Human Rights
Strength: Strong
Proposed by: Palixia

Description: ASSUMING nearly 800 million people live below the poverty line it becomes time to establish a United Nation World Food Program

Only 800 million?!!! Wow, considering the planetary population is in the trillions.......

VITCIMS of natural disasters like tsunamis, floods, earthquakes or Hurricanes or people who life below the poverty line should be helped

DISPLACED People - both refugees and internally displaced persons to leave towns and villages.

Um....I can't make heads or tails of this line

THE world's hungry poor, trapped in a twilight zone between poverty and malnutrition.

THE UNWFP also believes that women are the first solution to hunger and poverty. Women not only cook food. They sow, reap and harvest it. Yet, in many developing countries, they eat last and least.

How can the UNWFP believe that if they haven't ever been formed?

RESCUE: THE UNWFP should stand on a permanent state of alert, ready to mobilise food aid for delivery to natural and man-made disaster areas.

RAPID Reaction:The UNWFP should have a rapid response team draws-up contingency plans designed to move food and humanitarian aid fast into disaster areas.
rhe UNWFP should works closely with the other members of the UN family, governments and NGOs, offering its logistics expertise to guarantee the delivery of all kinds of humanitarian aid.

REHAB:the UNWFP food aid should also serves as a means to get disaster-affected regions back on their feet.

DETERRENCE: Malnutrition gnaws away at the most valuable asset in any country's development: its children and its workers. Food aid is one of the most effective deterrents against long-term poverty.

Voting Ends: Mon Sep 5 2005

Overall, the quality is too poor, the proposal is difficult to read, and there is no discussion about permanent sustainability, this just looks like a disaster relief issue rather than an actual proposal to help malnutrition or poverty.