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A Repeal Writing Guide: A Commonsense Guide to Writing Repeals

Tuesday Heights
13-10-2004, 05:24
A Repeal Writing Guide
A Commonsense Guide to Writing Repeals

Table of Contents
Introduction
Repeal: A Definition
Repeals: A Purpose
Picking a Resolution to Repeal
Passed Repeals
Failed Repeals
Language
To Quote or Not to Quote
Formulating an Argument
Drafts & Feedback
Contacting UN Delegates
Important Links
Credits


Introduction
Repeals were introduced to NationStates on September 23, 2004 and ever since then, countless nations have been trying to garner support to have previous United Nations resolutions revoked from legislature.

Therefore, it is the mission of this guide to help nations develop coherent and well-thought out rebuttals of any previous resolution in order to justify why it should be stricken from the United Nations floor in a coherent, diplomatic, and presentable way.

On October 23, 2004, the first repeal in NationStates history, Repeal Fight the Axis of Evil (http://www.nationstates.net/cgi-bin/index.cgi/page=UN_past_resolutions/start=77), was passed 13,343 votes to 2,722 votes. Congratulations to New Western America (http://www.nationstates.net/cgi-bin/index.cgi/page=display_nation/nation=new_western_america) for a job well done!

Repeal: A Definition
We should start with a definition of what a repeal actually is to separate it from a regular legislation proposal. According to dictionary.com (http://dictionary.reference.com/search?q=repeal), a repeal is:


To revoke or rescind, especially by an official or formal act.
Obsolete. To summon back or recall, especially from exile.


Just as a common proposal seeks to justify an addition to the legislation, a repeal does the exact opposite and seeks to justify a subtraction from the legislation.

Repeals: A Purpose
Keep in mind, in order to write a proper resolution, one must be well-versed enough into why a given law should become just that for the entirety of the United Nations. If a nation begins writing a resolution for name’s sake, to see them emblazoned in NationStates history, nine out of ten times that resolution will not even see the light of day in the proposal list.

The same is even truer when writing a repeal; thus, if a nation supporting a repeal goes into it with the theory of just getting the repeal passed, the repeal will reflect that in language, design, and effort, most likely resulting in not garnering enough support to reach queue.

Those who frequent the proposal list will no doubt tell you that since repeals have been instituted more than 90% are lost within the melee of proposals trying to make it into the queue for some of the following factors:

A given nation says it should be repealed simply because their nation says so.
The argument is left completely blank.
The resolution is in violation of a nation’s sovereignty.
Not representing the entirety of the United Nations.
It simply states the original resolution exactly using the negative form of each sentence.
The resolution occurred to long again to be representative of today’s voting population.


Picking a Resolution to Repeal
Any nation who wishes to repeal a resolution must proceed with caution.

Most resolutions were won by a large majority of the UN population, regardless of whether or not they are a sample of the current UN pool. The original vote should give a nation particular insight into whether or not launching a given repeal may be successful or not once it reaches the queue and into the actual voting stage by the entirety of the United Nations population.

Thus, it is important for nations to keep that idea in mind when going through the resolution list to eliminate legislation from the United Nations hall.

Some resolutions that might be good candidates for repeals based on numbers alone:

World Heritage List (http://forums2.jolt.co.uk/showpost.php?p=7029723&postcount=38)
The Rights of Labor Unions (http://forums2.jolt.co.uk/showpost.php?p=7029735&postcount=39)
Legalise Euthanasia (http://forums2.jolt.co.uk/showpost.php?p=7030048&postcount=44)
Universal Freedom of Choice (http://forums2.jolt.co.uk/showpost.php?p=7030124&postcount=54)
The 40 Hour Work Week (http://forums2.jolt.co.uk/showpost.php?p=7030161&postcount=60)

Passed Repeals
The following repeals have been passed:

Fight the Axis of Evil (http://www.nationstates.net/cgi-bin/index.cgi/page=UN_past_resolutions/start=77)
Repeal "Legalize prostitution" (http://www.nationstates.net/cgi-bin/index.cgi/page=UN_past_resolutions/start=86)

Failed Repeals
The following repeals have failed:

The 40 Hour Work Week (http://ns.goobergunch.net/wiki/index.php/Repeal_%22The_40_Hour_Workweek%22_%28failed%29)

Language
Writing a repeal, similarly, is just like writing a normal proposal when it comes to language. I would suggest reading Sophista’s United Nation’s Resolution Writing Guide (http://forums2.jolt.co.uk/showthread.php?t=342360) before seriously deciding how to formulate your repeal.

From there, one might want to check out The Elements of Style (http://www.bartleby.com/141/) by E.B. White. It is a handy reference of the basic do and do nots of the English language.

Some other resources that might be of interest to those who wish to write a real UN-inspired resolution can be found here:

RL United Nations Web Site (http://www.un.org/)
UNA-USA Resolution Writing Guide (http://www.unausa.org/education/modelun/resolution.asp)

To Quote or Not to Quote
After choosing a resolution to repeal, it is important to recognize whether the entire resolution is part of your argument or if only part of the resolution is part of your argument.

If one wishes to repeal the entire resolution, then, there is no need to quote the original resolution in your repeal. Instead, just make sure you address the main points of why one feels a repeal is needed. If you choose the above method, make sure you post the original resolution when asking for feedback from fellow nations so they do not have to dig up the resolution themselves.

However, if one wishes to repeal a resolution based on just parts, then, it might be more appropriate to directly quote the parts one has qualms with in the repeal itself in order to facilitate the ability for fellow UN members to understand exactly where your points are directed. Hence, there is no need to directly post the entire resolution when asking for feedback, instead, just make sure the members know exactly which resolution you are seeking to repeal is called.

For an example of the latter, please, check out my Repeal “Fight the Axis of Evil” here (http://forums2.jolt.co.uk/showpost.php?p=7209325&postcount=1).

Formulating an Argument
The whole point of your repeal is to convince the UN population that a given resolution should not be part of the United Nations legislature. Since the resolution passed the first time around, as already stressed, it is important that your counter-argument for revoking the resolution is sound, steady, and flawless.

Repeals need to be much more careful about word usage, exactness, and quick to the point without over-elaborating and crossing lines that the general population considers grievances against the United Nations.

Stick to the point of exactly why the resolution is to be repealed and above all else, do not go out on a limb as to why the resolution should be revoked. Sharp, steady, to the point, keep that at the forefront of the mind when writing a repeal.

Drafts and Feedback
The more drafts, the better, is always the case. After you first go through your repeal, post a thread in The United Nations’ forum requesting feedback from fellow UN members.

Incorporate suggestions that seem to be widespread and eliminate bits and pieces as you go to make the repeal the best it can be before submitting it to the proposal list.

Contacting UN Delegates
Always take caution when starting a telegram campaign to inform UN Delegates.

Once you submit your repeal to the United Nations floor, from there it is up to you to formulate how you want to go about contacting Delegates to approve it so that it will reach queue within the given time limit.

There are several ways to go about this, such as:

Telegramming
Telegramming can be either a rewarding experience or the bane of one’s existence. It is important that this telegram links to the text of your repeal, either by hosting it on an off-site forum or web site, or through the NS forums themselves. Do not just telegram a delegate, tell them to wade through the proposal list, and be done with it. Always be polite, ask for comments and/or concerns, and be respectful. If you receive a flame or otherwise negative response that adds nothing to your repeal, ignore it.

The United Nations’ Forum
Always post a thread in The United Nations’ forum when submitting a repeal for consideration by the UN Delegate population. Most UN members, along with Delegates, will offer suggestions, point out areas of weakness, and you will generally be able to gather a strong support from the population to start off with who will then let their Delegate know about your repeal.

Off-site Forums
Most of the feeder regions, and Lazarus, appreciate it if you post on their off-site forums, which you can find in their World Factbook Entry or by looking here:

The Pacific (http://www.pacificrepublic.tk/)
The North Pacific (http://s2.invisionfree.com/The_North_Pacific/index.php)
The East Pacific (http://invisionfree.com/forums/The_East_Pacific/index.php)
The West Pacific (http://s8.invisionfree.com/The_West_Pacific)
The South Pacific (http://invisionfree.com/forums/theSPacific/index.php)
The Rejected Realms (http://s2.invisionfree.com/Rejected_Realms/index.php)
Lazarus (http://corit.proboards23.com/index.cgi)

Depending on the size of the player-created region, some might also prefer you to post on their off-site forum; it’s important for you to find out ahead of time what the proper procedure is and follow through with it.

Also, off-site forums – particularly that of pro-UN regions – is a great place to find information, support, and technical data on the United Nations. One such example is the IDU off-site forum, located here (http://s4.invisionfree.com/The_IDU/index.php?showforum=14), which hosts a list of UN Delegates friendly to telegrams and those who are not. It is definitely a good resource to look over when telegramming Delegates specifically.

IRC
Unfortunately, it is yet to be seen how significant this type of contact with UN members and Delegates might be. Read Goobergunchia’s thread on the IRC NS UN channel here (http://forums2.jolt.co.uk/showpost.php?p=5915106&postcount=1), as he says:

Access Information:

Download an Internet Relay Chat (IRC) program. mIRC is the program that most of us use, but there are many others. A Google search for IRC programs should yield positive results for your particular system.
Connect to the server irc.esper.net
Join the channel #unitednations



Important Links
Some of these links are via the UN forum hosted by Jolt/NationStates and others are hosted on off-site forums and web sites, hopefully, they can provide some help to nations seeking to write resolutions and repeals alike:

United Nation’s Resolution Writing Guide (http://forums2.jolt.co.uk/showthread.php?t=342360) by Sophista (http://www.nationstates.net/cgi-bin/index.cgi/target=display_nation/nation=sophista)
Before you make a proposal… (http://forums2.jolt.co.uk/showthread.php?t=282176) by Enodia
Passed NS UN Resolutions (http://forums2.jolt.co.uk/showthread.php?t=357572) by Komokom (http://www.nationstates.net/cgi-bin/index.cgi/target=display_nation/nation=komokom)
A Case Study of Deleted Proposals (http://forums2.jolt.co.uk/showthread.php?t=330452) by Cogitation (http://www.nationstates.net/cgi-bin/index.cgi/target=display_nation/nation=cogitation)
United Nations Association (http://forums2.jolt.co.uk/showpost.php?p=7430596&postcount=8)
NSWiki United Nations (http://ns.goobergunch.net/wiki/index.php/Category:United_Nations )

Credits
First and foremost, I would like to thank Sophista and the contributors to his guide on writing successful UN proposals; I would also like to thank Enodia for his guide and insight into the NS United Nations from the very beginning of my time on NationStates.

Second, I would like to thank all those nations who regularly go through the UN proposal list who have shared their insights into what makes a good proposal on the forums both on-site and off-site.

Lastly, to all those who participate in the NS UN, without you, it just would not be much fun to be a part of it.

Edit(s): Added feeder region off-site forum links and a few resolutions that might have a good statistic to be repealed. Updated to reflect the first repeal passing. Cleaned up some style issues, typos, added the UNA link. Added more language links. Added another resource. Reconfigured some of the paragraph set-ups. Added info. on Repeal The 40 Hour Work Week.
Tuesday Heights
13-10-2004, 05:25
- Reserved for A Case Study of Inapprorpiate Repeals -
Tuesday Heights
13-10-2004, 05:27
Any and all comments, suggestions, and concerns are much appreciated!
Tuesday Heights
13-10-2004, 13:32
This actually is an incredible guide. Please add a copy to the UNA as well. :)

Thanks! I've worked for awhile getting it all solidified and organized properly; it's good to have a completed product.

You might also make a copy on the NSWiki, as your guide certainly follows their neutrality policy.

Definitely will when I get back from classes tonight and after my short nap. ;)
Hirota
13-10-2004, 14:25
May I nominate this topic for stickiness?
Tuesday Heights
13-10-2004, 18:13
May I nominate this topic for stickiness?

If you believe it merits it, please, by all means.

EDIT: I've requested for a Sticky to be made here (http://forums2.jolt.co.uk/showthread.php?p=7240440#post7240440).
Kryozerkia
14-10-2004, 14:48
Excellent job. This is well-written and informed. I hope that it makes it to a stocky and it is read by all of those who have taken it upon themselves to write a repeal.
ZhengHe
14-10-2004, 21:46
Definitely Sticky Material! :)
Peaonusahl
14-10-2004, 22:16
Well done, Tuesday Heights. I am beginning a campaign to encourage those who wish to propose a repeal to do so in a responsible and constructive manner. I will suggest they read your guide.
Tuesday Heights
15-10-2004, 01:02
Thanks again, to everyone, for the support; I will be adding more details and eventually - with Cogitation's blessing - a case study of ineffective repeals.

If anyone has any suggestions, comments, or concerns, feel free to e-mail me at tuesday.heights@gmail.com or contact me via any of the Instant Messenger programs to the left of the screen.
Tuesday Heights
18-10-2004, 06:11
Bumped on behalf of the good repeals beginning to creep into the proposal list. Good job, guys!
Mikitivity
18-10-2004, 17:07
I still think this should be stickied, but how about added this guide to the end of Sophista's? But to see if there can be a post at the beginning of the two guides that is a Table of Contents or Index?

An example would be Komokom's stickied thread.
Tuesday Heights
20-10-2004, 11:06
Congratulation to the author of the first repeal to make it to the NSUN floor!
Tuesday Heights
04-11-2004, 23:13
Bumped.
Hersfold
05-11-2004, 01:41
I also support the sticky motion. Good work as usual.
Tuesday Heights
06-11-2004, 04:51
I also support the sticky motion. Good work as usual.

Thanks for the sentiments; I take it the mods are busy this time of year, as a reason why no word has come to this matter.
Tekania
06-11-2004, 04:54
I guess you can update now on the fact that "Fight The Axis of Evil" has been repealed, and modify the area mentioning no repeals have reached quorum and passed yet.
The Most Glorious Hack
06-11-2004, 08:12
Yeah, edit to take into account Fight The Axis Of Evil being repealed, and I'll probably stick this.
Tuesday Heights
06-11-2004, 21:20
Yeah, edit to take into account Fight The Axis Of Evil being repealed, and I'll probably stick this.

All done. :p
Frisbeeteria
06-11-2004, 21:44
Would you mind updating the wiki page too, please?

http://ns.goobergunch.net/wiki/index.php/Repeal_Writing_Guide

It's too good for just one place.
Tuesday Heights
06-11-2004, 23:26
Would you mind updating the wiki page too, please?

http://ns.goobergunch.net/wiki/index.php/Repeal_Writing_Guide

It's too good for just one place.

lol. I leave for, like, two weeks and everyone starts making appearance demands! Sheesh!

Just kidding, Fris, I'll put it on my to do list for the evening. :p
The Most Glorious Hack
08-11-2004, 15:11
Stuck to the top of the Forum with...

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v251/Tindalos/ducttape.jpg
The Duct Tape Of Taping!
Tuesday Heights
08-11-2004, 20:36
Stuck to the top of the Forum with... The Duct Tape Of Taping!

Thanks, Hack! :)
Rome West
29-11-2004, 19:38
Stuck to the top of the Forum with...

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v251/Tindalos/ducttape.jpg
The Duct Tape Of Taping!

For the creative use of duct tape, this gets the Red Green seal of approval:

http://www.redgreen.com/images/scrapbook/red_green/bw_duct_tape.jpg

...and it couldn't have come to a better thread. Good work, Tuesday Heights.
Tuesday Heights
02-12-2004, 05:59
Thank-you, RW.
RomeW
07-12-2004, 11:08
You're welcome.
Tuesday Heights
15-12-2004, 19:15
Congrats to Leg-Ends for getting a repeal to the UN floor!
Pojonia
20-01-2005, 06:58
I have a question about this, actually. Can a repeal proposal also include a reform on the original concept? A strike out the old, in with the new sort of occurence? It seems to me that since the proposal actually appears in the U.N. Resolutions as a bona fide resolution, it could include additional action other than repealing the original resolution, but I'd like to affirm this before taking any action.
Powerhungry Chipmunks
20-01-2005, 07:16
I have a question about this, actually. Can a repeal proposal also include a reform on the original concept? A strike out the old, in with the new sort of occurence? It seems to me that since the proposal actually appears in the U.N. Resolutions as a bona fide resolution, it could include additional action other than repealing the original resolution, but I'd like to affirm this before taking any action.

No, I believe the ruling on this is that a repeal cannot enact new legislation. I'm not sure of the exact programming issues on this, but that's been the consensus I've observed from the mods. A repeal cannot introduce new legislation.
Tuesday Heights
29-01-2005, 08:25
Repeals must do just that: Repeal a resolution.

A new resolution must be put into place to enact new legislation.
Riversland
07-02-2005, 06:07
There should be a time limit for repeal. Eg "Tsunami Warning System" was implemented on Thu Jan 27 2005, already there is a repeal for it. This seams ridiculous putting an repeal already. Plus if a huge majority of people say 75% voted for it repeal seems unlikely.
Green israel
08-02-2005, 20:03
great work TH, but maybe the reapelin of the prostitution should get in to the list of the past reapel too, although now there is legalization on that subject.
Tuesday Heights
12-02-2005, 14:06
great work TH, but maybe the reapelin of the prostitution should get in to the list of the past reapel too, although now there is legalization on that subject.

I'll look through the list for the fast few resolutions/repeals and update it later today; real life has been a burden lately, and this has been of my last priorities. Thanks for the reminder! :)
Mikitivity
12-02-2005, 17:56
There should be a time limit for repeal. Eg "Tsunami Warning System" was implemented on Thu Jan 27 2005, already there is a repeal for it. This seams ridiculous putting an repeal already. Plus if a huge majority of people say 75% voted for it repeal seems unlikely.

While I tend to agree with you that proposals to repeal very popular resolutions that recently passed do nothing but clog up the queue with an idea that is extremely unlikely to reach the floor, I think it is upon us as pro-active UN members to keep the focus on proposed resolutions or repeals that we feel do have merit.

My largest complaint with repeals, especially the many Tsunami Warning System repeals, is the arguments used in the repeals are frequently addressed in the resolution text itself, and if not, then here in this forum.

I think it is reasonable to assume that many of the nations that submit repeals neither read the resolution nor the UN forum debate. It is a real shame, because in the Tsunami situtation many players refered to Tsunami's as "tidal waves". The reason this is particularly sad is if their repeals were to reach the floor, I'm confident that the 80% of the votes cast in favour of the original resolution would in turn vote against the repeal ... and I suspect that enough swing votes would actually bring the votes against even more so when the proponents could point to logical facilies made in the repeal.

The point isn't to suggest making repeals is hopeless. In fact, two have passed. One of which wasn't used to really remove an idea, but just improve a resolution's scope and text -- i.e. the prostitution issue.

A smart repeal author will look at resolutions which barely passed.

Here is a list of all UN resolutions, along with the percentage of votes cast in favour:
http://pweb.netcom.com/~mierzwa10k/una/Ressummary.pdf

Go for the marginal ones.

My second piece of advice is to not rush things. Do some leg work. Run a poll or survey asking nations if they really like that resolution. Either run the poll view a massive telegramming campagin or on the forums or both!

Literally spend a month doing this, because while you are doing this you can ask others if they'd endorse a repeal. Save those names.

Third, if you are only making a repeal to get your name in the queue, don't bother. Make a resolution instead. While there have been two resolutions that passed, stastically you stand the best chance of becoming "famous" by making a human rights resolution. That is like offering sugar to a kid, UN members clearly like human rights resolutions (and there is nothing wrong with that actually -- this is just an observation that is supported by the fact that the most supported resolution that got 92% of the vote was a HR resolution, and that the median support level for HR resolutions is a whopping 77% compared to the 72% for all resolutions -- including HR resolutions).

Finally, if you are really serious about a repeal, having a new draft proposal in hand to replace the idea you want to remove is wise. It need not be your idea, but only needs to be there as a point of contrast. Point people to this alternative, "Hey, I don't like the original resolution, and I think so-and-so has a much better way of dealing with the topic of marriage."