NationStates Jolt Archive

I was gonna submit this as a proposal, but I wanted some advice on it first.

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Passing this will result in banishing both the manufacture and using of biological and chemical weapons. Using poisonous gases and deadly diseases within warfare is inhuman. Just the development of these weapons is cruel and unusual punishment. Both humans and animals are subjugated to the testing of these weapons, leading to either being crippled for life, or dead. By passing this resolution, we can hope to reduce the amount of gruesome fatalities during wartime, both on and off the field. However, even with this resolution in action, other massive weapons of mass destruction can still be built and used.
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How it would change the game is it would limit the types of weapons that can be used during wartime. I think that maybe without having to worry about these types of weaponry. You know, building them or developing them. That would equal less money being filtered into the military, yes?

I don't know, I'm tired. Tell me how I can improve this.

I believe theres already a resolution prohibiting boi-chem weapons. Check the past resolutions on the UN page.

Category: Global Disarmament Strength: Significant Proposed by: Lovinia
Description: Biological weapons, if used during warfare or covertly, represent an enormous risk to the well-being of not just the target of said weapons, but potentially everyone on the planet. It is therefore imperative that nations eliminate these heinous weapons.

Votes For: 13023

Votes Against: 5449

Implemented: Sat May 31 2003

Its actually a very poor resolution. I can quite imagine that someone could argue that the resolution does not ban the use of biological weapons, merely that UN nations should ban them. And of course, chemical weapons aren't covered. Therefore a resolution that seeks to clarify the UN's position would be useful.

A Communist Broom,
Albion Broom Cupboard

Certain chemical weapons must remain legal and developed further. There should be variants on tear gas (CS gas) and pepperspray that are not harmful in the long run, and any resulting symptoms should be easily treatable.

Tell me how I can improve this.
Go read Sophista's post, United Nations Resolution Writing Guide (http://www.nationstates.net/forum/viewtopic.php?t=124639). You've done the right thing by posting for input first, now take the next step and put it into UN style format. You'll find that just the act of rewriting solves a bunch of your problems as you try to clarify what you mean.

Once you've got your revised version written, post it here and let us critique it some more. Can't hurt (much).

Likewise, I would encourage you to draft a proposal and then offer it up for analysis. We can't exactly critique the arguments offered until we can see the specifics of what you're going to accomplish.

Sincerely yours,
Daniel M. Hillaker
Minister of Foreign Affairs

Although there are some similaties with biological and chemical weapons, would it be better for me to put them in seperate resolutions, or for me to keep it in one..? Here is the first draft. Please make all the comments you want.

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The Guidelines to Chemical and Biological Weaponry

The former resolution concerning biological weaponry lacked solid structure. This resolution seeks to spell out the specific guidelines of both biological and chemical weaponry.

In regards towards biological weapons:

The use of deadly viruses or bacteria against an enemy during wartime is considered biological weaponry. Victims of these weapons suffer painful deaths from anthrax, small pox, and many other diseases. The testing of these weapons cause many human and animal casualties. Thus the following two laws will be put into place if this resolution passes.

1. The manufacture and testing of biological weapons is illegal.

2. Usage of biological weapons during both wartime and peacetime is illegal.

The second rule is in place for the reason that just because a country can’t manufacture it’s own biological weapons, doesn’t mean that they won’t try to buy these weapons from neighboring countries.

In regards towards chemical weapons:

Chemical weapons can have just as severe results as biological weapons. Chlorine gas, when inhaled, melts the lungs, leading its victims to suffocate to death. However, there are still good uses for chemical weapons. Thus the following laws should be put into play to help solve the confusion.

1. The manufacture and testing of lethal chemical weapons is illegal.

2. Usage of lethal chemical weapons during both wartime and peacetime is illegal.

3. Non-lethal chemical weapons, such as pepper spray and tear gas, can still be used.

(insert witty conclusion here)

There will be many arguments against this proposal on the same grounds as opposition to nuclear disarmament. That aside, we have a lot of sympathy for this proposal. The merits will no doubt be debated fully over the next few days. However, we wish to point out a couple of typographical issues:

"In regards towards" is a little clumsy - try "With regards (or respect) to".

I think "smallpox" is one word - would someone confirm this, please?

The opening couple of sentences beginning "The use of deadly viruses..." don't seem to read quite right. It might be worth checking against Sophista's guide and Frisbeeteria's current proposal for formal wording.

"It's" is incorrect, you should use "its".

When you refer to chlorine gas, maybe insert "for example".

I'm sure others could add other (better) points - I'm knocking this off in a bit of a rush!

Good luck
Maya Toitovna
Speaker for Home Affairs

actually, i used "its" right.

its - the possesive form of an object

it's - the contraction for it is, or it has

but i do liked some of your other points and will revise an arguement for the resolution. (i wasn't sure if we were supposed to place the argument within the resolution or just lay out the laws within the resolution)

The second rule is in place for the reason that just because a country can’t manufacture it’s own biological weapons

This should be "its", the possessive.

Comrade Rust
Delegate for Ludicrous Pedantry

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Smallpox is one word and very deadly

Can we include Brussel Sprouts and Vegetarian Sausages as Chemical weapons?
Yours hopefully,
Bahgum

Can we include Brussel Sprouts and Vegetarian Sausages as Chemical weapons?
Yours hopefully,
Bahgum

vegetarian meat products in general should be concidered some sort of weapon.

who really wants to eat a tofu turkey?