NationStates Jolt Archive

There is a new proposal up called "Educational Rights 4 Humanity." After reading it, I have determined that it is too funny to be taken seriously. It makes one thing that the only reason to approve this proposal would be to educate the person who wrote this trash in the first place. Here it is:


These following amendments are to ensure a better educational priority.
[To ensure what? How could a priority be educational?]

Amendment 1: Every person(s) have the right to an education without cost.
[OK, the parentheses with the "s" means that the sentence can be read, "Every persons have the right to an education..." or "Every person have the right to an education..." Neither of these makes sense.]

Amendment 2: Standard Education will begin at age 5 in Kindergarten and end at Grade 12. There can also be a pre-school or anything of the equivalent.
[So what is "Standard Education?" And the "equivalent" of what? Standard education? Kindergarten? The second sentence is unclear, and it is totally extraneous.]

Amendment 3: Every school is to be on the same grading and attendance system.
[In the world? That's going to be a little hard to manage. Does this mean that teachers all have to give the same tests? As for attendance, I believe that an absence is an absence. How many attendance systems are there?]

Amendment 4: Pupils who fail to achieve success for the next level have an alternative school to go to.
["Success for the next level?" What is that supposed to mean? Someone who loses a video game?]

Amendment 5: This alternative school will admit ANYONE who applies, but at a cost of money.
["A cost of money." Who pays this cost, the government or the student? Who sets this cost? Can black-footed ferrets get into this so-called "alternative school"?]

Amendment 6: The age at which anyone can have the decision of dropping out is on his/her 15th Birthday.
[This evidently means that only on this one day in your whole life can you decide to drop out.]

Amendment 7: Colleges/Universities must not make their decisions on ho to admit entrance based on race, religion, and any other discriminating attributes.
[I don't think attributes discriminate very much.]

Amendment 8: Failure to comply with any of these amendments will result in a fine from the UN to your nation. A fine will also be given if the educational priority drops below average.
[See my first comment about "educational priority." Also see a math textbook. This last clause would cause fines for approximately 50% of all nations on the planet!]

These amendments are to better the education of the present and the future.
[I think that neither the present nor the future needs to be educated.]

This proposal is so error-ridden as to make it laughable! :lol: :lol: :lol: See?

DISCLAIMER: My mother and grandmother were both English teachers. I, therefore, habitually look for grammar mistakes everywhere, even on the internet. I know that I am being way too hard on this proposal, and I really can't expect everybody to be perfect.

-Lunlux Magmarg, Aaronak Poet Laureate

We feel you are being far too hard on this proposal, and only a few of your points of criticism are truly important. For example, when the proposal states that "the age at which anyone can have the decision of dropping out is on his/her 15th Birthday," it really is very clear what it means. Yes, the proposal is far from being perfectly written, and the part about "alternative school" is rather unclear. However, in most other respects it is reasonably acceptable as far as NSUN proposals go.

Further, on "Amendment 8: Failure to comply with any of these amendments will result in a fine from the UN to your nation. A fine will also be given if the educational priority drops below average." Your criticism, "see a math textbook. This last clause would cause fines for approximately 50% of all nations on the planet!" states a false point. The average of 10%, 70%, 85%, and 56% is 55.25%. If those four numbers represented the education budget spending of four UN members as a percentage of the UN-advised per-capita budget spending, then only one nation -- the first one -- would have to face fines according to this proposal. Not approximately 50% of the nations in question.

Office of the Governor

We feel you are being far too hard on this proposal, and only a few of your points of criticism are truly important. For example, when the proposal states that "the age at which anyone can have the decision of dropping out is on his/her 15th Birthday," it really is very clear what it means. Yes, the proposal is far from being perfectly written, and the part about "alternative school" is rather unclear. However, in most other respects it is reasonably acceptable as far as NSUN proposals go.

Further, on "Amendment 8: Failure to comply with any of these amendments will result in a fine from the UN to your nation. A fine will also be given if the educational priority drops below average." Your criticism, "see a math textbook. This last clause would cause fines for approximately 50% of all nations on the planet!" states a false point. The average of 10%, 70%, 85%, and 56% is 55.25%. If those four numbers represented the education budget spending of four UN members as a percentage of the UN-advised per-capita budget spending, then only one nation -- the first one -- would have to face fines according to this proposal. Not approximately 50% of the nations in question.

Office of the Governor

Yes, I agree with everything you just said. I admit I go overboard a lot.

As for the math, though, it is very easy to 'prove' a point when you create the scenario. The average of 30%, 40%, 60%, and 70% is 50%, and the first half of all nations in this case would have to pay. I put the word "approximately" in there for a reason. When only four nations are being considered, one out of four is very close indeed to 50%.

Gee, I'm feeling really hostile today. :x :evil: :twisted: