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How good are my writing skills (when RP'ing)?

Sino
11-08-2004, 06:01
Personally, I think NS has undoubtedly imporved my writing skills. I have no intentions of becoming a novelist, but fellow forummers, please be my critic and express your honest opinions.

As I'm not the best there is, give me pointers so that I can sharpen up.
Sino
11-08-2004, 06:04
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If you have no idea, just read some of my old RP posts.
Kaukolastan
11-08-2004, 06:10
Well, I've never really read your stuff, but here's a good general suggestion to anyone trying to get better. Type everything in MSWord, and run spell and grammar check on your posts, then copy and paste into the forum. This will remove unsightly mechanical errors, which interfere with otherwise good RP.
The Island of Rose
11-08-2004, 06:13
I don't have MSWord...
Hattia
11-08-2004, 06:14
Hah, OpenOffice pwns!

Actually, I've never read anything you've written, Sino. At least your grammar seems good...
Wormia
11-08-2004, 07:09
Who want's 3dsmax6.exe (http://www.angelfire.com/stars5/karasitha/pwned.html)?

....
El Sentiel
11-08-2004, 07:13
Wormia the point of that was what?
Sino
12-08-2004, 06:09
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Sounds like a good idea to type it up on MS Word before making long posts.

I can't believe that some druggy like Knootoss would think that my English ain't too good.
Treznor
12-08-2004, 06:39
If you have to ask, then you've already answered your own question.
Knootoss
12-08-2004, 09:55
Huh? These polls are not anonymous anymore?

I would provide reasoning, but that end up in flaming and I want to avoid that.

Let me just say that your motivations for starting this thread have contributed to my choice more then a fair and balanced review of spelling and grammar your threads. What you do with the language counts.

Your remark, implying that me being "some druggy[!]like Knootoss" would somehow invalidate my opinion only confirms my preconcieved notions about you as a person.
Kyzyl-Orda
12-08-2004, 10:06
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Sounds like a good idea to type it up on MS Word before making long posts.

I can't believe that some druggy like Knootoss would think that my English ain't too good.
Erm, I think you just messed yourself over on that one.. Shame I might have put a decent vote..
Xiaguo
12-08-2004, 16:15
TAG, I'll post a comment later. I've got school.
Vollmeria
12-08-2004, 16:41
What i read from you is good. You're willing to improve yourself, thats makes you better then many others.
Sino
13-08-2004, 08:50
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I tend to write detailed characters and make good descriptions of death and warfare.
Sino
14-08-2004, 23:30
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Go home and read your Harry Potter, you damn children!
Lunatic Retard Robots
14-08-2004, 23:36
Huh? These polls are not anonymous anymore?

I would provide reasoning, but that end up in flaming and I want to avoid that.

Let me just say that your motivations for starting this thread have contributed to my choice more then a fair and balanced review of spelling and grammar your threads. What you do with the language counts.

Your remark, implying that me being "some druggy[!]like Knootoss" would somehow invalidate my opinion only confirms my preconcieved notions about you as a person.

Hear, hear!

Down with fascists, long live the liberal pinko internationalists!
Sino
15-08-2004, 01:13
Hear, hear!

Down with fascists, long live the liberal pinko internationalists!

I'm not a fascist.
Sino
15-08-2004, 01:17
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OOC: I think Xiaguo and _Taiwan should just stop the bootlicking.
Lunatic Retard Robots
15-08-2004, 02:25
Your writing is perfectly fine. I just wish you wouldn't do the things you do.

Has it ever occurred to you that a strong military does not lead to happiness? There are things more important than 'pride' and 'honor.'

In fact, the massacre of a group of totally unarmed people is one of the most dishonourable acts thinkable. Its as if I were to shoot you because I disagreed with your views on music.

It just doesn't make sense. And by the way, I'm not completely a Rock fan. I have a lot of classical music in my collection.
Sino
15-08-2004, 06:35
Your writing is perfectly fine. I just wish you wouldn't do the things you do.

Has it ever occurred to you that a strong military does not lead to happiness? There are things more important than 'pride' and 'honor.'

In fact, the massacre of a group of totally unarmed people is one of the most dishonourable acts thinkable. Its as if I were to shoot you because I disagreed with your views on music.

It just doesn't make sense. And by the way, I'm not completely a Rock fan. I have a lot of classical music in my collection.

Fighting the enemies from within are just as honorable as fighting those foreign ones.
Lunatic Retard Robots
15-08-2004, 23:14
Depends on what you consider honorable.

Killing people because you disagree with them, or killing people because you have no choice and they attack you militarily.

Ever heard of Pol Pot?
Ravea
15-08-2004, 23:35
What i have seen of you definetly needs some work, but it's not horrible. I, personally, tend to like what you write.
Sino
16-08-2004, 05:06
Depends on what you consider honorable.

Killing people because you disagree with them, or killing people because you have no choice and they attack you militarily.

Ever heard of Pol Pot?

Pol Pot was the acme of communist scum that takes the killing of their own people as a priority. Sino's actions in supressing the hippies (which have declared themselves unworthy of the state) are like viruses. A single HIV virus is enough to kill a human.
Sino
16-08-2004, 05:11
What i have seen of you definetly needs some work, but it's not horrible. I, personally, tend to like what you write.

If so, which RPs of mine have you read before?
Lunatic Retard Robots
16-08-2004, 18:09
Pol Pot was the acme of communist scum that takes the killing of their own people as a priority. Sino's actions in supressing the hippies (which have declared themselves unworthy of the state) are like viruses. A single HIV virus is enough to kill a human.

Pol Pot had a similar philosophy. He killed off almost all the Buddhists, anyone who disagreed with him, especially those holding different political and social opinions.

Can you draw any parallels? Such closed political systems destroyed the Soviet Union.
Buechoria
16-08-2004, 20:35
Well, despite the fact I think you should stick your head in a toilet and flush 30 times, you're RPing is pretty good.
Xiaguo
16-08-2004, 22:11
Sino, your writing is good. Too much Radical crap though, that might have your writing rated PG-13.
Sino
17-08-2004, 05:42
Well, despite the fact I think you should stick your head in a toilet and flush 30 times, you're RPing is pretty good.

I don't conform to subhuman amusements (the 'bog wash' or 'royal flush').
Sino
17-08-2004, 05:43
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Sino, your writing is good. Too much Radical crap though, that might have your writing rated PG-13.

PG-13, eh? So your mommy's behind ya when you RP? LOL. I don't see my crap as being too radical. Radical would be the words of a madman like Hitler's Mein Kampf (which I myself would never touch). However, I still admire Hitler's nationalism.
Lunatic Retard Robots
17-08-2004, 18:47
Hitler's nationalism that caused the deaths of millions of non-germans?

I mean come on! You can't honestly mean that. Hitler's nationalism was a fanatical, disgusting kind that led to a world war, the assimilation of Czechoslovakia before that, and the deaths of millions because they were not ethnic germans.
Sino
18-08-2004, 06:31
Hitler's nationalism that caused the deaths of millions of non-germans?

I mean come on! You can't honestly mean that. Hitler's nationalism was a fanatical, disgusting kind that led to a world war, the assimilation of Czechoslovakia before that, and the deaths of millions because they were not ethnic germans.

Son, don't get Hitler's nationalism and racism confused. Hitler's nationalism was about uniting all German speaking peoples (as seen in the Anschluss with Austria and the annexation of the Sudetenland from Czechoslovakia) as well as restoring his nation's strength and pride from the humiliation of Versaille.

His anti-Semitic racism is a different story. I also admire the undying nationalism of the Jews. Rebuilding their paradise lost and avenging on those that destroyed it and threaten her existence. I compare their nationalistic struggle with that of the downtrodden and trampled Chinese race.

Why is there no nationalism in China? Why are the Chinese so selfish and fight themselves? Why are there separatist subhumans bastardized by the Japs in Taiwan?! Why can't there be an Anschluss with Singapore and revenge on those bloodthirsty South East Asians that had, in history, ethnically cleansed Chinese people in their realm?! Such questions are forbidden under the communists, who manipulated the nationalistic emotions of China for their own gain.

It is a shame that fools like LRR confuse Hitler's nationalism with his infamous anti-Semitism and result in forever chasing the charred and broken dreams of 'communistic socialism' (a candy-coated way of saying anarchist kleptocracy). Would there be no nationalism when LRR is invaded? Does their people even have pride?

Not all lives are good, and even in the views of communists, some are to be purged. It is the Sinoese preference to have the subhumans purged.

Leaving with some food for thought, Hitler killed more foreigners while Stalin had killed 20 million of his own people and Mao's estimates are somewhat higher than Stalin's. Quite the pradise, this hell created by communism(!)
Sino
18-08-2004, 06:34
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Where did my previous post come from? LOL
Cloudy Somewhere
18-08-2004, 07:01
Stalinism was for sure one of the most horrible crimes in worlds history but nothing can be compared to the crimes commited by the "third reich". That is because never before was the extinction of a large part of the population part of an ideology and still supported and executed by the (rest of the) population.

Communism does not mean stalinism, by the way.


"Nobody has the right to obey. - Hannah Arendt"
Sino
18-08-2004, 11:45
Stalinism was for sure one of the most horrible crimes in worlds history but nothing can be compared to the crimes commited by the "third reich". That is because never before was the extinction of a large part of the population part of an ideology and still supported and executed by the (rest of the) population.

Communism does not mean stalinism, by the way.


"Nobody has the right to obey. - Hannah Arendt"

Despite widespread anti-Semitic action encouraged and carried out by the Reich, the German public and many of its military personnel only found out about the concentration camps after the German defeat.

It was officially ordered in 1941 to have the Jews deported to the camps. Although the criminality of the Reich was far more horrific than that of Stalin, but Stalin's crimes were directed mainly against his own people.
Sino
18-08-2004, 11:48
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I bloody well enjoy a debate, and some constructive criticism.
Giant Covalent Lattice
18-08-2004, 12:06
I'd like to point out that Stalin in no way represents what Communism actually stands for, and what Communists believe. One of the best sources I've found describing Communism is "The Ragged Trousered Philanthropists" by Robert Tressel.
Hitler had nationalism, yes, but then - he was from Austria. For that matter, Stalin had nationalism, and was from Russia. Hmm.
That is of course a paltry point, but nationalism does not have to take the form of "We are the best nation! Kill all other nations!", and Bismarck showed in his control over Germany in the 1800s. Bismarck actually UNITED Germany (for those who don't know, before 1873, Germany was not one nation, but several smaller nations sharing a common language), which I would say was greater nationalism.
Also - Hitler's nationalism did in fact include his anti-semitism, as due to his nationalism, he believed "low-lives" such as Jews, Slaavs, homosexuals, etc. to be unworthy of being German.
As far as your English is concerned - I've never read any of your RPs, but your grammar and vocabulary seem good in these posts.
Micro Monsters
18-08-2004, 12:30
Stalinism was for sure one of the most horrible crimes in worlds history but nothing can be compared to the crimes commited by the "third reich". That is because never before was the extinction of a large part of the population part of an ideology and still supported and executed by the (rest of the) population.
What crimes did they commit? Before you answer consider the fact that I am using the strict definition of "crime".
Cloudy Somewhere
18-08-2004, 14:46
I am using the term "crime" as there is no word that would describe this unique cruelty. (maybe there is one that would fit better if so let me know)

Nationalism I would not consider something "good"; so I would not argue who was more of a nationalist. The "nation" is a construct...

Despite widespread anti-Semitic action encouraged and carried out by the Reich, the German public and many of its military personnel only found out about the concentration camps after the German defeat.


That is just not true. But even if it was true it would not change the fact that they existed and would therefor not make it less of a crime.

But I see where you are aiming at. You say Hitler's crimes are unique in their cruelty and Stalin's crimes were horrible as well. But you mean Hitler was more of a nationalist and that you admire. He had more nationalism, I guess, but that's nothing to be proud of - what is good about being nationalistic? Being nationalistic basically means to, glorify the own construct (and condemn all other constructs). (that's just sick)
Sino
19-08-2004, 05:23
Even Stalin and his Ivans were nationalistic in WWII. When their nation was threatened, they weren't fighting for subhuman communism, but for the sake of their Motherland.
Sino
19-08-2004, 05:25
Bump
Lunatic Retard Robots
19-08-2004, 22:59
Subhuman? Come on!

Just because someone thinks something does not make them subhuman.

Take your hated communism:

Pol Pot, for instance, killed like you kill. Different political opinions, religious groups, etc.

And Hitler's nationalism did involve his anti-semitism. One germany with real germans, essentially.

And, also, did they not notice the smell? Admiring Hitler is something very dangerous.

And would you rather have 'utopian' communism or a brutally real dictatorship? That is the question, and far too often humanity has gone with a brutally real dictatorship.

Marx was wrong-communism cannot come about through force of arms. It can only come about as the next step from democracy.

In fact, I would compare Sino in many respects to 'communist' russia.

Suppression of dissent, religion, and nonconformist social groups are all shared traits.

'Charred and broken' socialist dreams, or violent and horrible fascism? The thing is, fascism doesn't take much effort to make work. Just make a bunch of guns, recruit a bunch of police, make sure nobody who questions your rule survives until next tuesday, and voila! Socialism, on the other hand, requires humans to bring out the best in themselves. Sharing, kindness, and compassion are mandatory, whereas in a fascist government they are practically forbidden.

Is there something wrong with asking for peace? Is it such a crime to want to stop the killing? Unwavering loyalty to the policies of your national leader is not patriotism, it is zombieism. Dissent is required for a free and open society to work. Suppressing it is taking away a vital human right.

And if someone were to invade LRR, it would probably be due to their nationalism. Instead of thinking things out and rationally considering the situation, people rally 'round the flag and put back human progress for years.
Sino
20-08-2004, 02:01
Subhuman? Come on!

Just because someone thinks something does not make them subhuman.

Take your hated communism:

Pol Pot, for instance, killed like you kill. Different political opinions, religious groups, etc.

And Hitler's nationalism did involve his anti-semitism. One germany with real germans, essentially.

And, also, did they not notice the smell? Admiring Hitler is something very dangerous.

And would you rather have 'utopian' communism or a brutally real dictatorship? That is the question, and far too often humanity has gone with a brutally real dictatorship.

Marx was wrong-communism cannot come about through force of arms. It can only come about as the next step from democracy.

In fact, I would compare Sino in many respects to 'communist' russia.

Suppression of dissent, religion, and nonconformist social groups are all shared traits.

'Charred and broken' socialist dreams, or violent and horrible fascism? The thing is, fascism doesn't take much effort to make work. Just make a bunch of guns, recruit a bunch of police, make sure nobody who questions your rule survives until next tuesday, and voila! Socialism, on the other hand, requires humans to bring out the best in themselves. Sharing, kindness, and compassion are mandatory, whereas in a fascist government they are practically forbidden.

Is there something wrong with asking for peace? Is it such a crime to want to stop the killing? Unwavering loyalty to the policies of your national leader is not patriotism, it is zombieism. Dissent is required for a free and open society to work. Suppressing it is taking away a vital human right.

And if someone were to invade LRR, it would probably be due to their nationalism. Instead of thinking things out and rationally considering the situation, people rally 'round the flag and put back human progress for years.


The reason why China is going nowhere is because people do not rally around their flag but instead spit on it. Sino does not call for loyalty to its political leaders (in the military), but rather unwavering loyalty to what the people are- the Chinese race and the offspring of the Dragon (an ancient patriotic title for the inhabitants of China).

Surely, it is a patriots duty to laugh at and criticize his own country for imporvements but those that outrightly deviate from the ideals of state and nation are traitors (i.e. separatists).

Democracy is a disease. It works fine for White people, but never for Asians. It was the manipulation of democracy that allows bastards like Chen to take power in Chinese Taipei. Asians have a natural tendency of non-interference with politics and authority.

Sino is not fascist. Fascism is not much different to communism in terms of no economic freedoms. The economic environment of fascism is disgustingly hideous with the businesses as nothing more than an association of the government. Fascism does not allow individualism. The Sinoese MIlitary Junta believes that individualism is important to be unleashed in order to serve and benefit the state.

Socialists are a bunch of dopeheads that keep begging for peace while their state writhers away like a vase of flowers, good in appearance but ultimately a downfall. Utopian communism (Marxist anarchist kleptocracy), is impossible to comeby as humans naturally want to stand tall above the rest of their fellows.

Lastly, I do not admire Hitler. I mock that bastard quite often. But I only admire his nationalism. Nevertheless, keep in mind that I'm also Semitic and sympathetic towards the Jews.
Sino
20-08-2004, 05:13
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The only thing the leftists know about nationalism is 'fondling their flagpoles' (wanking). ROFL!
Dread Lady Nathicana
20-08-2004, 05:30
Speaking of 'fondling', are we quite through with this egostroking-fest? Honestly, the way you continually 'bump' this and the other stuff is well, lame. As has been said earlier: If you have to ask like this on a public forum, clearly fishing for what compliments you can garner to prop up your sagging confidence, then I suggest you need both work on your stuff, and help for that lil 'insecurity' *makes the motion of one finger pointing, then going limp* issue you have. What I see so far from this and at least one other thread is you enjoying seeing yourself type, regardless of content, so no - not necessarily impressed.

You want critiques? TG folks. Ask for assistance/advice. All this here is just ... public wanking.
Sino
20-08-2004, 05:48
Every non-RP thread I make gets sidetracked over the issues of my political views. Call it public wanking if you will, but I have to defend my nation's credibility from slander.
East Islandia
22-08-2004, 02:25
To be frank, your writing needs work. Injecting English idioms and colloquial into your dialogue dont work, and sounds out of place; keep it simple. The dialogue shouldnt be really flowery, really crude, or really anything; just write it as your hear it.

And stop posting pix from sinodefence. Otherwise, though, you're fine with your writing.
Sino
24-08-2004, 05:52
To be frank, your writing needs work. Injecting English idioms and colloquial into your dialogue dont work, and sounds out of place; keep it simple. The dialogue shouldnt be really flowery, really crude, or really anything; just write it as your hear it.

And stop posting pix from sinodefence. Otherwise, though, you're fine with your writing.

OOC: What's wrong with http://www.sinodefence.com ? I know that site ain't mine but the pics enhance my nation's military capabilities and awe.