The war of the nations(Gin gins cival war) (open rp)
The last time you saw the nation of domination was:-
The nation of domination load up there guns readly to fight then some one jumped out. Mad dog and Gino shut the person 10 time, but it was not a man it was a dummy. So the nation of domination loaded there guns up again and got readly to fight again. The sound at the nation of domination heird vaded away slowly.
But then "BANG"...............................
To be contined. See what happens tommorow.
Be free to post your wars.
Henleaze Avenue
02-12-2003, 15:02
Coherence is always fun. Any explanation of what's going on?
This is what happened
An aeroplane came out of the sky from the united states of Gin gins arrive on the battle area of the war in the wastes.
Gino (the leader of the Gin gins army), mad dog and much more people in Gin gins army
" What a mess." said mad dog (A Gin gin people)
"what happened in this war? " Said Gino,
Mad dog looks at all the dead body’s on the flour and step of them
"Wait there gino I here something" said mad dog as he heres some sound in a tree near the army.
All of Gin gins army get out there guns.
Gino finds a name for his army; they are now called the nation of domination.
The nation of domination continued to walk along the damp and dark road of wastes war path then they found under rotted tree leaves a sign saying the scorpion swamp, after looking that the nation of domination still continued walk down the path suddenly out of the rotted bug infested tree a black poison snake jumped out lucky mad dog got out a gun and shot it in the head,
" That was close.” said mad dog
" You were lucky Dog." said Gino,
" Don't call me dog." said mad dog,
" Ok." said Gino.
The nation of domination continued to walk down the path, then they got to the end of the damp and dark path and they saw some people at the end, who are they?
The person that the nation of domination came up to was a member of motosium army.
Gino got out a gun and shot the person of motosium team to the flour,
"Gino good job you killed him." said mad dog
"Thanks." said Gino
They walk out of the path and in to a batte zone.
So Meanwhile the nation of domination were walking slowly on the battle zone, walking over lots and lots of dead bodys.
Then one of the bodys on the flour grabed mad dog with the only hand he as left,
" Help me please?" said the guy on the flour of the battle zone,
Mad dog looked down at him and shot him in the head,
" Who was that?" said Gino
" No one." said mad dog
They slowly walked down the battle zone, looking down for any more live bodys.
The nation of domination continued to walk down the battle zone, but then some people run up to them,
" Need some help?" said said the men,
" Who are you?" said Gino,
" We are the 2nd army of the the nation of domination." said the army,
"Cool." said mad dog,
All of The nation of domination with there new 2nd army from the united states Gin gins continued to walk on the battle zone full with dead bodys on the flour of the battle zone.
The nation of domination walked and walked for 2 hour and so far found no one so they have a break.
As the nation of domination moved down the dirt and dark track, eyeing the surrounding trees and leafs, something was eyeing them. Movement in the bushes up ahead made the Sargeant hand signal for his squad to halt. Further signals made by the officer were for Privite Himms to scout ahead, whilst the nation of domination provided were ready to provide cover fire.
The nation of domination takes out there gun ready to fight what ever hides from them. The nation of domination here the sound of foot prints comes closer and closer, the nation of domination start to sweat the sound get louder.
The nation of domination load up there guns readly to fight then some one jumped out. Mad dog and Gino shut the person 10 time, but it was not a man it was a dummy. So the nation of domination loaded there guns up again and got readly to fight again. The sound at the nation of domination heird vaded away slowly.
But then "BANG"...............................
Rename this to 'The war to improve gin gins' role play skill!' :lol:
Jeruselem
03-12-2003, 14:19
We should just annex his nation and then tell him we will not leave if he doesn't improve ... just joking. :P
How can I improve this then? Please help?
http://www.nationstates.net/forum/viewtopic.php?t=59907
Jeruselem
03-12-2003, 14:59
and this one
http://www.nationstates.net/forum/viewtopic.php?t=29774
But then "BANG".
One of the nation of domination amy men was shot right to the ground!
"NNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOo!" shouted mad dog,
Who is next?
" Mad dog, shot right there in the bush." said Gino as he points some where in the bush.
Mad dog shots.
Then some one fell out of the bush and on to the ground dead.
The nation of domination run in that way were the body fell.
Daamfeck
11-12-2003, 14:56
How can I improve this then? Please help?
Learn English....
How can I improve this then? Please help?
Learn English....
right?
Gin gins' original
This is what happened
An aeroplane came out of the sky from the united states of Gin gins arrive on the battle area of the war in the wastes.
Gino (the leader of the Gin gins army), mad dog and much more people in Gin gins army
" What a mess." said mad dog (A Gin gin people)
"what happened in this war? " Said Gino,
Mad dog looks at all the dead body’s on the flour and step of them
"Wait there gino I here something" said mad dog as he heres some sound in a tree near the army.
All of Gin gins army get out there guns.
Gino finds a name for his army; they are now called the nation of domination.
The nation of domination continued to walk along the damp and dark road of wastes war path then they found under rotted tree leaves a sign saying the scorpion swamp, after looking that the nation of domination still continued walk down the path suddenly out of the rotted bug infested tree a black poison snake jumped out lucky mad dog got out a gun and shot it in the head,
" That was close.” said mad dog
" You were lucky Dog." said Gino,
" Don't call me dog." said mad dog,
" Ok." said Gino.
The nation of domination continued to walk down the path, then they got to the end of the damp and dark path and they saw some people at the end, who are they?
The person that the nation of domination came up to was a member of motosium army.
Gino got out a gun and shot the person of motosium team to the flour,
"Gino good job you killed him." said mad dog
"Thanks." said Gino
They walk out of the path and in to a batte zone.
So Meanwhile the nation of domination were walking slowly on the battle zone, walking over lots and lots of dead bodys.
Then one of the bodys on the flour grabed mad dog with the only hand he as left,
" Help me please?" said the guy on the flour of the battle zone,
Mad dog looked down at him and shot him in the head,
" Who was that?" said Gino
" No one." said mad dog
They slowly walked down the battle zone, looking down for any more live bodys.
The nation of domination continued to walk down the battle zone, but then some people run up to them,
" Need some help?" said said the men,
" Who are you?" said Gino,
" We are the 2nd army of the the nation of domination." said the army,
"Cool." said mad dog,
All of The nation of domination with there new 2nd army from the united states Gin gins continued to walk on the battle zone full with dead bodys on the flour of the battle zone.
The nation of domination walked and walked for 2 hour and so far found no one so they have a break.
As the nation of domination moved down the dirt and dark track, eyeing the surrounding trees and leafs, something was eyeing them. Movement in the bushes up ahead made the Sargeant hand signal for his squad to halt. Further signals made by the officer were for Privite Himms to scout ahead, whilst the nation of domination provided were ready to provide cover fire.
The nation of domination takes out there gun ready to fight what ever hides from them. The nation of domination here the sound of foot prints comes closer and closer, the nation of domination start to sweat the sound get louder.
The nation of domination load up there guns readly to fight then some one jumped out. Mad dog and Gino shut the person 10 time, but it was not a man it was a dummy. So the nation of domination loaded there guns up again and got readly to fight again. The sound at the nation of domination heird vaded away slowly.
But then "BANG"...............................
Improved version
This is what happened
Some rebel faction was rising up against the government of Gin gins and so the elie unit aka 'Mad Dogs' was ordered to take out key rebel targets.
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A plane of the Gin gins airforce flew low over the jungle top towards the distant battle on the horizon. "What a mess." Said Corporal Stone with a hint of disguss in his voice as he watched the jungle pass on by through the small window of the plane.
"Aye this war has sure gone to hell" Replied Sargeant Hicks as the plane slowed down for landing on a make shirft run way, hastily built after the ground was taken back from the rebels. However as soon as they stepped out of the plane it became clear that the rebels might have tried to retake the airstrip or at least raided it.
The crude wooden and iron built 'huts' were covered with holes made by machine gun fire. A few soldiers unluckily enough to be in the way of the foresaid machine gun fire laid scattered around the site.
Private Himms threw up.
Hicks ordered his squad to split up and search the site to make sure it was safe however there was sudden movement in the bushes nearby.......
OOC; Gin gins, now THATS how you do a rp, don't copy.
Thanks.
Tommorow I will continue my RP.
Thanks again steam earth.
The army paste past the mistey forst facing the groung ahead.
Faster and faster they contine to run past the damp and mudey forst, but then they retracked there steps back a few cm.
Because they were there in frount of them, my arm turned around fast and ran.
My army ran and ran past the muddy grounds of Gin gins.
The other army was not far behide them.
Then one of the leaders of Gin gins found a opening in the war and he fired..........